|Reviews for One Heartbeat|
| jomanflea chapter 1 . 10/18/2012
I enjoyed this little introspective piece, it was interesting to read your take on how Neji's relationships with his team members had developed.
From a con-crit point of view it could use a little tightening on grammar here and there e.g. "And that statement was sometimes more literally meant than figurative at times." You shouldn't use both the "sometimes" and "at times" in the same sentence, one or the other, as you effectively say the same thing twice :)
Hope you don't mind the review on an older piece, but I had fun reading it.
| ScarletCamellia chapter 1 . 5/4/2010
Aw! This is adorable!
| Cutlery Pieces chapter 1 . 4/24/2010
Why are there no reviews for this story? I liked it a lot. Neji is a tough character to capture, but you've done a lovely job!
I especially enjoyed how the title tied in really nicely with the last line. It was sweet.