Reviews for A Chance in Time |
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![]() ![]() ![]() I love your characterization of Severus! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I think this is supposed to happen in their 5th year and severus wouldn’t have had the mark yet. Not until after he comes of age or leaves hogwarts. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Ik this is practically done but… i assume tgey are 7th years? Since lily and james are dating. Severus at that time already created his book on potions. Or at least his corrections to it. You know, “property of the half blood prince”? One would think he knew all those tiny tricks hermione is showing him in large because she learned from him. |
![]() ![]() Acho que a Minerva quem vai mudar algo sobre Severus, ela sabe como e sabe quando, só precisava ajudar ele e manter ele escondido até Hermione voltar para seu tempo, seria perfeito |
![]() ![]() So...I just found this story. It's so compelling! I absolutely love it. Your characterizations are spot on. Not sure if you'll see this comment 14 years later, but I'm so here for this! |
![]() ![]() stop making her a pcikme |
![]() ![]() ![]() Loved it! |
![]() ![]() ![]() I'm not the biggest fan of time Turner fics normally but this was AMAZING. it had me straight bedridden glued to my phone. couldn't put it down |
![]() ![]() ![]() Sigh… that was lovely. I totally binge read this and now I’m regretting not reading slower. I loved the subtle changes you made that had lasting effects on the future. It all seemed very plausible in terms of the story line, which is difficult to imagine given how things ended. Loved it all though. Thank you for this story! |
![]() ![]() ![]() Still love this fic. First one I ever read 10 years ago |
![]() ![]() Absolutely loved this story |
![]() ![]() ![]() 1 Hermione feels OOC, more like self insert OC. 2 Dumbdumb and Hagrid talk different too. Both mannerism and vocabulary. 3 With how intrusive Dumbdumb is with his legilimency probes, it only made sense in the beginning when he suspected her a death nibbler. Later on it's just rude. Pervert. 4 Cover story is half assed, any smart student would dismantle it in a short time after some superfluous social questioning. At least in other fics the time traveler has a name of previous school for transfer story or claims a background of private tutoring, or is patroned by existing family... 5 No House rivalry represented, nothing stops Snape from chatting up Hermione? No other student characters aside from marauders and Snape. Snape doesn't interact with any snakes at all? 6 I don't think Hermione would sit on her buttocks playing student instead of unraveling her predicament. Why won't she go to Unspeakables? I see she's under the assumption she would go back(forward) yet she stays risking to deform the future she would go. Considering her future is "war won" and she might change that to "war lost", she's really careless. Yea, I know she used time turner for years to attend additional lessons, but still. Unless she persuades herself with some knowledge about time continuum and time paradoxes, in that case she should've at least thought about that too justify that. 7 Almost any character interaction is for a reason. If she falls, she falls into someone's hands/into someone chest. If she has a facial expression, someone notices that and thinks. And so on. . Overall, reads like low quality self-insert female teenage fantasy. I wouldn't be surprised to have some smut later on, with Hermione dramatically deciding to go pro-active to protect her new love. Discontinued reading. |
![]() ![]() Best HP fanfiction I've read in a long time. Well written too. |
![]() ![]() ![]() Too late now. You might as well just do what feels right. Lol. |
![]() ![]() ![]() why keep Peters role a secret? |