|Reviews for Our First Time|
| mione03 chapter 8 . 6/22/2010
Hi...i am so sorry for the delay to make a review here,but i think so i had already reviewed the chapter 8 and when i come here to confirm this i saw i don't make a could have sent me an email asking if I would comment the chapter!Well go to the portuguese part of your comment!
Bom eu simplesmente amei a reação da Rose quando viu que a Bella não estava realmente achei que a vmapira iria entrar em pânico e enlouquecer totalmente!Mas com certeza o melhor foi a Bella voltando do desmaio e pergutnando porque a Rose tinha parado de beijá-la!Ri muito nessa parte!Adorei essa avolução no beijo das duas!Sabe que descobri que já tinha lido fics suas?Que aliás,acompanho,outras fics suas?Bom eu simplesmente AMEI muito mesmo esse capítulo!Bem se quiser aprender novas palavras ou conversar mais me avisa que te passo meu email,ok?Querida parabéns mesmo pelo capítulo e pela fic cada vez melhor!P. desculpe mesmo pela demora em comentar e espero que goste do que escrevi!
Beijos e tchau
| Condor green chapter 8 . 6/22/2010
| 51readaholic15 chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
yay you updated, and it was a rather less-dramatic chapter than first anticipated... or thought. But maybe that's just because most of the other fics I'm reading are oh, so dramatic presently.
Enjoyed the brief reference to your bb's and JT's fanfics. I enjoy seeing where this fic 'originated' and where a lot of your vamp facts come from. Mostly because I understand the reference without the need to get them from your bibliography notes. (that's the right word for it, right? It's been so long since I was in an English class.)
It's still oh, so cute to see Rosalie's sweet(er) side, and Bella's cute little rebutals. I'd be greedy with Rosalie kisses too, so you can't blame Bella for wanting 'mowhre'.
haha Alice knows just when to show up for a little bit of Rosalie/Bella teasing. Comes in handy when you're clairvoyant(ish) and you wana pick fun at someone.
Anticipating the next chapter for some Alice/Rosalie bickering/teasing. Those scenes are always so much fun.
| Krazikamikazi chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Ooo I absolutely love your stories :) I screamed when I found out you updated :)
| Avarenda chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Well, at least Bella didn't pass out...Again. I wonder why Alice and Jazz are coming to interrupt their 'alone' time. You'd think Alice (considering how she reacted to Bella asking to 'do it') would do her best not to get in the way.
| TheMonkeySong chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Honestly, this is probably my least-liked chapter you've written for this story...I haven't really pegged as to why it's my least-liked chapter yet...
I'll read it again and PM you my constructive criticism. I know when people don't like what I write, I at least like to know why...so you'll know why shortly.
I did think the whole 'let me be yo' bug spray/cure-all' was uber cute!
| ima nut so what aka pussyninja chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Omg, and i dont mean usher..lmao. But seriously, i have like the biggest grin on my face, and it would probably give the joker a run for his money! It literally feels like im about to split my face in two. Cant help though, this story is soooo awesome, evethough im still waitin for that hot smex!
| Koriander-Ger chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Great,great chapter again:) and your "cross references" to other story's\story-content takes almost "King'sche* characteristics..love it!
I cant wait for the day when you start writing "real" Story's from A-Z..and when i have to wait 5years for that to happen..then i wait happily.
Grüße aus dem schönen Norden:).Kori
| EverlastingMuse chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
| GothicPheonix chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Okay, you may want to applaud yourself now because...you are actually making me like this pairing more than Bellice. Shocker right? Well, not so much given your writing skills :) They are SO perfect together :) Poor Rosalie was actually panicking a little internally. I love this quite right here, because Bella would so try that: (I spat, "And don't you dare try practicing that at home to prove me wrong. If I hear from Carlisle that you've ended up at the hospital on some stupid stunt, I will so …") See, I bet if you wrote Twilight, and put great logic like with the venom, that there wouldn't be so many hatred...then again you'd have to make the pairing Rosalie and Bella because Edward is just ick! XD *hugs* You are amazing...now I REALLY want to write a story with you...I think I know which one because I'm doing this mega crossover I've been working on since I was little...and I've been thinking ahead but continually forgot to write it...so I'll probably need your help for an alternate universe story; will be Rosalie/Bella :) And you know how to be inside Rosalie's head XD I love this chapter ) It was so sweet. i am so glad I graduated last Friday :)
| 1711AdvenaAvis chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Awesome job !
I can't wait for the next update.
| boozemoose chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Again, a wonderful chappy! It's sweet to see Rosalie's "soft" side. We definitely need more of that!
I sighed, "Yes, I can, honey, by not letting you put any of you into my mouth."
Ah damn, then how...? Hmph! Poor Bella... ;D
| massrie chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Absolutely sweet and delicious. Both of them. Rosalie and Bella together is just precious.
I adored the kissing, sweet and while not altogether chaste, still comforting.
And Bella scampering off so as not to get caught by Alice and Jasper! love it!
I absolutely 3 this story!
Please to continue with the kissings... yes?
| mione03 chapter 5 . 6/16/2010
Hi...well i am glad you enjoyed my review and you have learned onde new since you like i'll write the rest of review in portuguese!
Oi...sério que você também ama esse capítulo?Pelo jeito temos algo em realmente não me importo que você me responda em inglês,porque assim aproveito para treinar meu inglês!O capítulo é simplesmente fantástico!Eu amo a parte em que a Bella elogia a Esme e a Rose pergunta com quem ela se pareçe para a Bella e a humana diz que com ninguém e a vampira entende errado o comentário!Essa parte é incrivelmente linda e emocionante!
A Esme é realmente muito doce,mas igualmente assustadora quando se fala em pular refeições,principalmente o café da manhã!Adorei o que ela fez com os poptarts(apesar de não saber o que são)e depois falando para a Bella que eles não tinham os poptarts em casa!
Tenho que te dizer que estou totalmente viciada na fic e que li a história mais de 3 vezes!
Se você quiser nós podemos continuar conversando e eu posso te ensinar mais palavras em português!
Parabéns pela história incrível que você escreve!
Estava pensando sobre o título e vi que o nome da fic é bem sugestivo e pensei se esse vai ser o ponto alto da fic!
Beijos de sua fã
| boozemoose chapter 7 . 6/15/2010
Sooo... since I can't take the desperate begging and nagging anymore... here's a little review in German for our authress extraordinaire:
Ich liebe diese Story! Die Charakterisierung von Rosalie (sowie den anderen Figuren) ist sehr überzeugend, realistisch und authentisch. Insbesondere mag ich ihre Gedanken und ihren außergewöhnlichen Humor, so herrlich sarkastisch und zynisch. Es gab Stellen, an denen ich mich überhaupt nicht mehr einkriegen konnte, z.B. mit Esme in der Küche - einfach nur klasse!
Allerdings muss ich auch zugeben, dass mich Bella's "mausige" Art manchmal echt nervt! Ich wünschte, sie würde Rosalie hin und wieder etwas mehr Paroli bieten. Mit ihrem mangelnden Selbstbewusstsein und ihrer Naivität kann ich mich teilweise nicht so gut identifizieren, weil ich ihre Aktionen und Reaktionen oft mit mir selbst vergleiche, was möglicherweise daran liegt, dass ich mir insgeheim wünsche, an ihrer Stelle zu agieren. :)
Jedenfalls bin ich schon nach diesen wenigen Kapiteln total gefesselt von der Story und süchtig nach weiteren Updates. Ich hoffe, dass noch viele Kapitel folgen werden, denn von Rosalie kann man einfach nicht genug bekommen...
Okay, how's that for a start? Jag kan översätta det på svenska också - om du vill? Men det får dina plastunderkläder att smälta... Lita på mig!
Oh, and as for the french kissing... lmao! Poor Bella, how is she EVER going to survive the next step? Maybe I should volunteer to evaluate the risks for her? ():-) But in this case, I'd prolly be having a few issues myself, like, changing nappies all the time...
Can't wait for the next update, 'phfina!