Reviews for Our First Time
blackswirlycloakguy chapter 1 . 6/22/2010
Hey, so this is a review of all your stuff I've read, not just this, it's just this is your most recent fic.

Where to begin? Your portrayal of Rosalie throughout (and her relationship with Bella!) is brilliant, insightful, and actually adresses a lot of the problems that would arrise, unlike other fics which tend to rush straight into things with little or no thought. And your Rose stays completely 100% in character! She really is the Rose we vaguely glimpse through SM's cluttered and abortive prose.

Ok, specifics on other fics. The American gods one (I'm so sorry I can't remember its name) was v. good too, Neil Gaiman is a great author and you brilliantly captured the aura of the seriously old gods living in the modern world.

Mild negative stuff now! Sorry. More positives later, I promise. (clears throat). The bad thing about you however is that you are a little like another very good fanfiction author, who I won't name, but he tends to take a long time to finish multi-chapter fics he starts. And you, in a more minor way appear to have the same problem. (BELLS ARE RINGGING cough cough). Then again, I'm hardly one to talk.

But now onto your best, and possibly weirdest fic 'Rosalie and Me'. I tend to think of myself as a bit of a whinger and escapist with a suckky life but man, you have me beat on all fronts! Tell Rose next time you talk to her that she's got another convert.

Best of Wishes and update All Soon,

mione03 chapter 8 . 6/22/2010
Hi...i am so sorry for the delay to make a review here,but i think so i had already reviewed the chapter 8 and when i come here to confirm this i saw i don't make a could have sent me an email asking if I would comment the chapter!Well go to the portuguese part of your comment!

Bom eu simplesmente amei a reação da Rose quando viu que a Bella não estava realmente achei que a vmapira iria entrar em pânico e enlouquecer totalmente!Mas com certeza o melhor foi a Bella voltando do desmaio e pergutnando porque a Rose tinha parado de beijá-la!Ri muito nessa parte!Adorei essa avolução no beijo das duas!Sabe que descobri que já tinha lido fics suas?Que aliás,acompanho,outras fics suas?Bom eu simplesmente AMEI muito mesmo esse capítulo!Bem se quiser aprender novas palavras ou conversar mais me avisa que te passo meu email,ok?Querida parabéns mesmo pelo capítulo e pela fic cada vez melhor!P. desculpe mesmo pela demora em comentar e espero que goste do que escrevi!

Beijos e tchau

por mione03
Condor green chapter 8 . 6/22/2010
i like
51readaholic15 chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
yay you updated, and it was a rather less-dramatic chapter than first anticipated... or thought. But maybe that's just because most of the other fics I'm reading are oh, so dramatic presently.

Enjoyed the brief reference to your bb's and JT's fanfics. I enjoy seeing where this fic 'originated' and where a lot of your vamp facts come from. Mostly because I understand the reference without the need to get them from your bibliography notes. (that's the right word for it, right? It's been so long since I was in an English class.)

It's still oh, so cute to see Rosalie's sweet(er) side, and Bella's cute little rebutals. I'd be greedy with Rosalie kisses too, so you can't blame Bella for wanting 'mowhre'.

haha Alice knows just when to show up for a little bit of Rosalie/Bella teasing. Comes in handy when you're clairvoyant(ish) and you wana pick fun at someone.

Anticipating the next chapter for some Alice/Rosalie bickering/teasing. Those scenes are always so much fun.
Krazikamikazi chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Ooo I absolutely love your stories :) I screamed when I found out you updated :)
Avarenda chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Well, at least Bella didn't pass out...Again. I wonder why Alice and Jazz are coming to interrupt their 'alone' time. You'd think Alice (considering how she reacted to Bella asking to 'do it') would do her best not to get in the way.
TheMonkeySong chapter 8 . 6/17/2010

Honestly, this is probably my least-liked chapter you've written for this story...I haven't really pegged as to why it's my least-liked chapter yet...

I'll read it again and PM you my constructive criticism. I know when people don't like what I write, I at least like to know you'll know why shortly.

I did think the whole 'let me be yo' bug spray/cure-all' was uber cute!
ima nut so what aka pussyninja chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Omg, and i dont mean usher..lmao. But seriously, i have like the biggest grin on my face, and it would probably give the joker a run for his money! It literally feels like im about to split my face in two. Cant help though, this story is soooo awesome, evethough im still waitin for that hot smex!
Koriander-Ger chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Great,great chapter again:) and your "cross references" to other story's\story-content takes almost "King'sche* it!

I cant wait for the day when you start writing "real" Story's from A-Z..and when i have to wait 5years for that to happen..then i wait happily.

Grüße aus dem schönen Norden:).Kori
EverlastingMuse chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
very good!
GothicPheonix chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Okay, you may want to applaud yourself now are actually making me like this pairing more than Bellice. Shocker right? Well, not so much given your writing skills :) They are SO perfect together :) Poor Rosalie was actually panicking a little internally. I love this quite right here, because Bella would so try that: (I spat, "And don't you dare try practicing that at home to prove me wrong. If I hear from Carlisle that you've ended up at the hospital on some stupid stunt, I will so …") See, I bet if you wrote Twilight, and put great logic like with the venom, that there wouldn't be so many hatred...then again you'd have to make the pairing Rosalie and Bella because Edward is just ick! XD *hugs* You are I REALLY want to write a story with you...I think I know which one because I'm doing this mega crossover I've been working on since I was little...and I've been thinking ahead but continually forgot to write I'll probably need your help for an alternate universe story; will be Rosalie/Bella :) And you know how to be inside Rosalie's head XD I love this chapter ) It was so sweet. i am so glad I graduated last Friday :)
Lazielow chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Awesome job !

I can't wait for the next update.
boozemoose chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Again, a wonderful chappy! It's sweet to see Rosalie's "soft" side. We definitely need more of that!

Oh, and...

I sighed, "Yes, I can, honey, by not letting you put any of you into my mouth."

Ah damn, then how...? Hmph! Poor Bella... ;D
massrie chapter 8 . 6/17/2010
Absolutely sweet and delicious. Both of them. Rosalie and Bella together is just precious.

I adored the kissing, sweet and while not altogether chaste, still comforting.

And Bella scampering off so as not to get caught by Alice and Jasper! love it!

I absolutely 3 this story!

Please to continue with the kissings... yes?
mione03 chapter 5 . 6/16/2010
Hi...well i am glad you enjoyed my review and you have learned onde new since you like i'll write the rest of review in portuguese!

Oi...sério que você também ama esse capítulo?Pelo jeito temos algo em realmente não me importo que você me responda em inglês,porque assim aproveito para treinar meu inglês!O capítulo é simplesmente fantástico!Eu amo a parte em que a Bella elogia a Esme e a Rose pergunta com quem ela se pareçe para a Bella e a humana diz que com ninguém e a vampira entende errado o comentário!Essa parte é incrivelmente linda e emocionante!

A Esme é realmente muito doce,mas igualmente assustadora quando se fala em pular refeições,principalmente o café da manhã!Adorei o que ela fez com os poptarts(apesar de não saber o que são)e depois falando para a Bella que eles não tinham os poptarts em casa!

Tenho que te dizer que estou totalmente viciada na fic e que li a história mais de 3 vezes!

Se você quiser nós podemos continuar conversando e eu posso te ensinar mais palavras em português!

Parabéns pela história incrível que você escreve!

Estava pensando sobre o título e vi que o nome da fic é bem sugestivo e pensei se esse vai ser o ponto alto da fic!

Beijos de sua fã

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