|Reviews for Redemption|
| icer01 chapter 1 . 5/1/2010
A great premise! Dahlia's very believable, especially early in the fic. Actually, I don't think Mia was mature enough to ever forgive her that way (even if Dahlia had shown that type of remorse). I always thought Phoenix's response to Dahlia in 3-5 was way more mature and reasonable than Mia's; in contrast to 3-1, again. Hmm, guess the writers in the games don't want to offer Dahlia any hope at redemption. I always felt way more sorry for her than Iris... heh.. Maybe it's Dahlia's dream/hallucination?
...I'm not conveying exactly how good this fic is. It's VERY good.
| Alice chapter 1 . 5/1/2010
Wow... that's all I can say.
Actually, I think this story deserves more than that! This was a beautiful piece. You portrayed Dahlia really well here, and it makes sense why she did what she did when she was alive... and dead.
To see Dahlia see that she was wrong... that is not an easy thing to do. No one wants to be wrong. Humans are like that. But when they realize their mistake, it's not too late to turn back and start over. Not sure being dead counts, though. lol Okay, I really shouldn't laugh at the dead. _;
| Blue Deity chapter 1 . 5/1/2010
Very few people in this world will admit to being evil. No matter what the circumstance or a person's actions, people believe themselves to be justified, either because good and evil are relative or because they truly believe their actions work towards a greater good. Some of the most evil people in human history truly believed that what they were doing was good in the end. Because of this, Dahlia admitting to herself that she is evil is quite powerful. A tortured soul coming to grips with the pain she caused during her life, a very poetic concept and story. Nothing more needs to be said.
| ChihiroAyasato chapter 1 . 5/1/2010
Very interesting concept right here!
Can't really offer critiscm coz you're my beta reader...and I don't seem to find anything wrong with it.
The use of swear words were really effective with Dahlia! :D
I like the italics part and the past...how she starts to just hate everyone and wither up inside.
And I also like the part were you made Mia swallow before saying Diego-kun's name. *jumps around happily*
Love this story! Love how you write too! Simple yet effective sentences have always been your cool writing point! (That sounded weird and could have been expressed MUCH better than what I said, but anyway *)
Faved! Because I REALLY like it.