I cannot tell you how happy I was to see this.

This is making it all the more intriguing. You mean, Edward's been watching her all this time? I loved the analogies to fire. They feel like really appropriate descriptions.

hmmmm... haunting lyrics...

This really piqued my curiosity. I am dying to find out who or what Edward really is.

I could feel his tension here. I love Scarborough Fair too.

"His eyes locked onto mine, befuddling my common sense with their intense scrutiny."

I really like this line. I haven't seen the word "befuddling" in quite a while and it fits perfectly. Just one word does the trick to capture what she's feeling right then.

Edward, you can take me home, too!

This was very good, dear. I really want to find out what you have in mind for this. I think I will PM you now.

Whut da?

You really ramped up the tension there. While I wish it didn't end there, that made for a very good cliffhanger.

That was cool.

I can't tell you how happy I was to see the e-mail notification on this. This was really good. I felt her despair and hurt. Your writing is so simple and fluid. I really like that about your entries.

Okay. Now that was excellent. It all seems so tragic for Edward. The struggle is palpable. Wow.

I'm smiling.

You make ME want to taste him too!

What did she tell him? Oh man... I would love to know what has led her to the bridge in the first place.

Still good. I think you should increase your word count for the challenge. How about a 500 word count? Please?

Okay, I know my review has to be a little bit more meaningful, but can I just say, "Eeeeep!"

I'm glad you've continued this. Now, I'm feeling the pressure. Taking a week off is a little disconcerting.

I liked how this is progressing.

There was something about the way she touched him that was oddly thrilling to me. Like she's breaking through and facing what brought her to this chance meeting in the first place.

- LOL, my comment feels longer than your entry!

It's so fun to actual keep up with something as it evolves. This is so cute. I can actually get a feel for the place.

I really like what you're doing with this short story. The challenge is great, keeping each one a hundred words only. You're able to put so much in so few words.

Nice.

I've been enjoying this little mini-story!

i really want to know more about this edward. what is he doing with bella? where are they? why is he undressing her?