I figured it out! This whole story so far is extremely OOC.. Which is fine considering what you're going for here, but this was the itch I couldn't scratch. I feel better knowing.

it's not that the makeup of this chapter is bad, it's just something doesn't quite sit right. it almost seems rushed, bare boned? A sort of lack of detail that kind of... leaves much to be desired in terms of causing any sort of emotional reaction. I'll continue reading and hope that maybe it gets better? it's an excellent premise.

Read this story again. And ugh I just love it!

LOVED IT!
Thank you for writing!
You know, I was always averse to read BellaxCaiusXMarcusXAro but, girl, you rock!

i was picturing alexander skarsgard as caius, he is such a beautifully masculine man!

I enjoyed the story

Only a tall person would wonder how a small one could be so enthusiastic.
Great story though!

I read your story and enjoyed it very much. It was very diffrent from the usual twilight stories. You should write more! Thank you for sharing.. D

This was breathtaking. I lost track of time reading this. It was marvelous. :3

In a time of travesty, I indulged myself in this masterpiece. Wow, I adore this story so much. Looking forward to re-reading this in the future.

Not as rushed as the last one... Interesting

~Pappielle

My username is pronounced poppy elle. If yuou must know.

I can tell the story was rushed...

~Pappielle

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I love this story. Mágifíço!

I LUV IT.