|Reviews for Degeneration|
| Lexi0521agmail chapter 8 . 12/19/2018
I just finished reading this story and enjoyed it thoroughly. It was fast paced but did not detract from the story at all. I also enjoyed how the story was still well flushed out. Well done.
| Argonaut986 chapter 8 . 5/28/2018
That’s one mess over, to some extent.
| Argonaut986 chapter 7 . 5/28/2018
Things got awkward, for Harry.
| Argonaut986 chapter 6 . 5/28/2018
Things are getting complicated.
| Argonaut986 chapter 5 . 5/28/2018
Seneca Davis is a jerk.
| Argonaut986 chapter 4 . 5/28/2018
This infection is potentially worse than raccoon city.
| Argonaut986 chapter 3 . 5/28/2018
The mess has begun anew.
| Argonaut986 chapter 2 . 5/28/2018
Things are getting quite interesting.
| Argonaut986 chapter 1 . 5/28/2018
Wesker HAS to be the involved.
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/12/2014
Still some flaws but pretty good.
| Leonais Frostwind chapter 8 . 9/23/2012
Decent story, although there were some spelling and grammar errors. Example: "Claire sighed as they continued driving looking for Downing; but without a destination it was trying to find a needle in a haystack. Harry kept on talking to himself, Leon looked back at Harry like he was crazy."
| Ariamity chapter 1 . 6/23/2012
While i love and beyond love the concept of this story, as you've just meshed two of my favorite story lines together, there is a major no no in this chapter, you didnt introduce Fredrick downing the head researcher of wilpherma. so how do you expect harry and claire to get to the air dome facility in the first place if they havent been introduced to him? on a different not it seems as if you've completely rushed this, and like this is a boring project to you. the point of a cross over is to bring two different worlds together, and make them works as one cohesive unit. With this its just as if you've put harry in here and made him go along for the ride. you should think about how harry's character would be affected by the raccoon city incident, and how he was treated by the dursleys. you should decide if you want good harry or bad harry. and i reiterate, you want to bring in more of the HP world. would dumbledore go looking for him because he's worried or because he's a manipulative bastard. Why is harry in the US. Did he run away, you said he's going back home, to england right? you need to think of a way to bring more of the HP world into the story. anyway i really hope you think about this.
P.S. Oh and one more thing try to work on length.
| edboy4926 chapter 8 . 2/6/2012
| Von chapter 8 . 2/2/2012
There's really only one main problem with this fic, and it's common to crossovers.
What you are doing, is re-telling a story that already exists. Harry is just bobbing along for the ride, like someone copy-pasted an image of him into the movie.
When Harry's presence doesn't change anything, why is he there? If your story isn't something new, why are you writing it?
I can understand that you want Harry to exist in this situation. That's fine, that's how most crossovers start! :) But from there, you need to kick back and think about how to develop the story in a new direction as a result of him.
This may make it so that the movie story is barely mentioned at all, as Harry himself fights to survive in a different part of the terminal and tries to find Leon and Claire after he hears their voices over the radio. Maybe your story is primarily told through flashbacks of Harry's childhood as he is carried - badly injured and barely conscious - through the events we already know and don't need to be retold.
Maybe Harry gets infected but retains his mind, trying to help them escape even though he knows he'll have to be killed or risk being captured.
These are just examples and I'm sure you can think of better ones, but as a general starting point? If you're writing more than one or two direct quotes from the movie, you need to take a long hard look at where you're going with the story.
Ad on a completely unrelated note, I kept thinking Harry was around twelve years old. Gagging at Leon and Angela having a moment? Bat-Bogey? He was pretty juvenile.
| Basilisk1 chapter 1 . 5/13/2011
I loved it!