Interesting to learn that it is probably a curse on certain children.

Yea, I could not see Walter going anywhere else. Glad Harry got the house he wanted.

I love that Lily can have so many children like this. Normally this would be a bit much for anyone, but she does have help, I just wish James would grow up here.

James in this story is an idiot and not a good father. Walter has major issues I have seen in children, it’s more than just him being a spoiled brat here, though that is a lot of the problem.

Heading is unnecessary. Obviously, Harry Potter was created by JK Rowling.
Too many chapters too.

Very very weird and odd and out of place. Fairly far fetched and made up stuff.

Ok, Walter killed his owl. I’m officially terrified of him

Walter is such a spoiled little brat

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I think this a brilliant idea, and is unique among the stories of Harry having twin brother (the fact that Lily actually likes him and recognises James is spoiling Walter) but it came off little bit daft, to be honest. A really doubt Lily and James would have that many kids. Also, you have a lot of grammar errors in the story (I’m not great at grammar either, so I can’t really judge.)

It’s a really, really great idea but a lot of mistakes grammar wise. I mean absolutely no offence when I say this and please don’t think I do, I love this story.

I love the idea of Nana Rose and how Harry is in Ravenclaw. Walter is a spoiled brat and I wonder what will happen to him. Poor Lily, having all those kids.

Anyway, that’s what I’ve got to say. I love this story, but it has a few errors.

You had a lot of this person told this person and they told another person. It was a fair story. It didn’t fully make sense. There is no resolution evident. Unless, is it the support meeting? I think that the next chapter should less focused on Walter. I get it he’s a main character, but each chapter is more of the same. Walter is causing problems, he’s different, and dumb. You are just being repetitive in your writing. I’m saying this writer to writer you can’t be repetitive and have a great story. If you want a fair story that’ll work for you, but you could achieve a lot better work if you tried harder.

I read part of the first chapter and, not going to lie, it was quite badly written. I was about to quit but decided to see what the later chapters were like and you have improved. Majorly. I would like something to see how much your writing has changed in almost eight years, but I'm not forcing you to do so.

Returning your review :)
I do like twin stories as you know. Poor Harry, destined to be second again whether to Dudley or Walter!
Good old Mrs Weasley, always there for him!

Not very good

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