Tom is giving aunt marge vibes.

comedy

why not use few confunduses or kidnap him

Pourquoi les meilleures histoires ne sont jamais terminées, c'est assez frustrant de se dire qu'on ne connaîtra probablement jamais la fin. Dommage

This is my third time readingggg. I love the writing.

In all honesty I'm rather surprised by how much I enjoyed this unique piece. So many things were different from canon but you did an excellent job with it. I also really liked your explanation on magic and how it ties into aging and immortality. That was one of the most original plot devices I have seen in a while. The whole plot was rather interesting with how that tied into other things and everything came full circle by the end. The only things I didn't really care for is how long it took to get to the Tom and Harry romance, how little of that we actually got to enjoy in the over all piece, and all the different points of view. Some of the scenes were interesting but so much of it felt unnecessary even though it all kind of tied together. Personally I would have enjoyed seeing the Dursley's dealt with and the war officially end, especially if we got to see more romance between Harry and Tom.

Vh

I LOVE IT! ADD MORE PLEASE!

I really enjoyed this story, there really isn't a lot of good stories that follow this plot line. However, I'd recommend cutting down the amount of Pov's to one or two. I feel like it weakens the story, it's not a long drawn out story featuring characters in different parts of the world so i don't see a point in knowing what all the characters are thinking. It would make fleshing out the dynamic between Voldemort and Harry easier. which this story needs. More focus on drawing out events surrounding Harry and his realisation that Ron is against him etc.
Hermione and her worries are interesting, but I'd rather read a story fully focusing on her than one with her featuring as a side character. It doesn't do her justice.
That's the thing, as great of a concept is, and as good as ur writing is, if the story doesn't focus on the main characters and leave the rest up for us to find out along the way, it doesn't do anything justice.
Aside from that, i don't have anything else to really critique the story on, i was just enjoying it too much to really notice anything lol.

ha! you wish

Interesting story

Thank you

I can't tell you how much I loved this fic. Yes, it could be expanded easily. Yes, it could have more after the ending of Dumbledore. Yes, it could have a could use more Backstory. However, the simplicity of the fic is what makes it perfect, so all of the above additives are irrelevant. Thank you for touching on all my favorite points in this story.

solid*

because one of the listed greenest is romance, 8 would have preferred some better relationship building (beyond the whole 'his magic is calling me' thing) however I do like what you have. its a relatively shorter book and it was a nice quick read for me so any changes would really only add to the length so yeah,

sid 7/10