|Reviews for The Paper|
| P.I.R chapter 1 . 5/28/2010
okay. I have some problems with your fic. nothing big but your fic would be better without the little bugs.
1) at one point I saw a "did'nt" which isnt right. its "didn't"
2) your characterisation was off. it started off with characters perfectly IC (in character) but then they detiriorated into OOC (out of character) and not slightly either. but majorly OOC. and I know that getting them in character is hard (I have difficulty with it to) but this far OOC?
and there were a few other grammar and speeling mistakes but the idea WAS a good one.
please dont take any of this the wrong way. I am just trying to help. and if any of this is coming off as harsh than I am sorry.