|Reviews for One Minute In Heaven|
| Devils'kin chapter 8 . 12/21/2013
Please update this story!
| writeratheart007 chapter 8 . 12/17/2013
I've noticed you've started writing again, will you be finishing this story too? I hope so. I'm going to keep it on my favorites list for a while still since I know you're getting caught up on other stories too. Can't wait to read more!
| writeratheart007 chapter 7 . 9/6/2013
Ok so something needs to happen to Ginny here. ... I'm wondering if perhaps something could come up in one of the classes ... oooo DADA!
Ginny decides to start trying to spread seeds of dicention as part of the beginning of her plan. First, she asks quite loudly in front of a class where Harry and Hermione were in if there were a way with a dark spell to fake being soul mates to the general populas. And if he could tell them about it, and what the signs are.
Lupin goes into telling how in the old days they didn't believe in soul mates and that people who gained extra power through the soul bonding ritual were seen as having stolen power from their more powerful mate. Hes almost interrupted by Ginny but would continue with something along the lines of but it was proven 300 years later that it was a shared power force and that soul bonding was only not able to be faked or forced, as it was something that was /only/ granted by the ancients but that those who tried to break a bonding would be punished. The last one being the example of (make up a name of someone who was caught trying to kill a mate and ended up being of all things turned into a statue that sits in some museum).
Ginny doesn't believe it and at some point tries to do something to Hermione, with Dumbledores help. This being the 'last straw' as it were for him helping her, as she's convinced Hermione faked or forced it. And when she tries, she gets turned perhaps into a tarnished silver statue with some kind of writing at the base that shows she'd been punished by the ancients and no matter how much people try and polish it she'll never polish a showing of whats inside to the outside. Perhaps have it be public too so people /know/ and this is one of those things that reinforces the ancients still being amongst them. Dumbledore only getting away from it (or so he thinks) cause he left at the last minute. Maybe his punishment is much more subtle...
| JAS19831 chapter 8 . 8/22/2013
I'm sorry to hear about your home. I hope your friends and family are safe, and I will be praying for you all. I look forward to you continuing this story. I think you have great ideas and a fresh concept.
| russell.broad.14 chapter 8 . 7/30/2013
Looking forward to seeing the rest of this. Please keep up the good work.
| irishbabygrl chapter 8 . 4/13/2013
this is great so far i hope more is to come soon
| TwilightGirl2012 chapter 8 . 3/27/2013
Omg! Your story is fing amazing I'm completely in love right now!
| Binka Fudge chapter 8 . 3/16/2013
I know it's a while since you updated this wonderful story and after the authors note at the end i can only hope it's just because you're enjoying real life. Thank you for making me smile, I look forward to reading more of your stories.
| Runecutter chapter 7 . 2/13/2013
That was unnecessary. I've never been a fan of all those swearing and can see a thrilling confrontation without anybody being accused of being overtly promiscuous, mentally challenged or damaged in appearance, heritage or whatever... it just makes a story sound crude and vulgar to use it so freely and on everybody's lips. Then Hermione overreacting so strongly just because somebody has not fought, going as far as punching her in the face... that's a little much out of character. I mean yes she punched Draco, but he had to collect a lot of unavenged grief beforehand and it was a very emotional moment where he said exactly the wrong thing. We did not even get a warning here that Padma might have irked Hermione at any time in the past so where did the punch come from?
And over time the three stooges on cloud nine become a bit wearysome. Couldn't they act a slight tad more mature?
It's so sad, because the story started out pretty strong with a solid idea that was written well enough to be captivating. But meanwhile it seems to have lost your attention and the writing gets sloppier with every new chapter, mainly in grammar and spelling but as seen in this chapter in the plot too.
Why don't you give out more information... why had it to be three Gryffindors and one Slytherin? If they mix the houses the logical way would be one of each, just like in Noah's ark! (when we're looking at the males and females seperately of course ;))
With a lot more of background work and information given out about why the things are how they are this could become a great story. As it is, it scratches barely at an adequate level of "about average" when compared to the other things on this website.
| Runecutter chapter 5 . 2/12/2013
The monetary amounts are still stupidly overblown... And you wouldn't even write them the way you did if they were okay... you don't say 100,000 Million you say 100 billion and a grant of about 10% of his wealth for the school is a bit much, don't you think? and you don't write 100,000 thousand but 100 million and it's a very high rate for EACH shop and business in DA and Hogsmeade.
I can understand Harry's need to see Hermione protected but simply buying out TOnks of the Auror Corps? Shouldn't they at least ask Kingsley or whoever now is Head of Aurors? maybe even the Head of DMLE... of course 500,000 Pound Sterling a week is quite a good salary... So she'd want to quit anyway and start this job just for the possibilities the money means for her family. But still this demanding lordly demeanor does not fit to shy and humble Harry.
And maybe it's time that something ... happens. They've only stated their love, met the parents and acted some things out in the bank... other than that nothing... not even the Greedsleys have avenged their great losses yet. I'm nobody to smirk over atmosphere and building up tension and suspence... but it's getting a bit long before something decisive happens, the last time was "he's awake" in chapter 2 or so...
| Runecutter chapter 2 . 2/12/2013
storywise it's been even better than the first chapter, maybe just lacking the real confrontation with the "in-laws" that has been alluded to at least twice... but grammar and spelling are horrid and make some sentences hard to decipher... can't you get some decent beta to spot at least some of the mistakes?
| Runecutter chapter 1 . 2/12/2013
Quite good, if a bit crude and flamboyant in it's exuberance: One trillion galleons? Honestly? I'm not sad or angry about the levels the different persons got... but wouldn't it have done a number smaller let's say give him a million of the shiny golden things at all which is still mind blowing when you look at his wand which cost 7 Galleons! 50,000 or 100,000 are solid and serious fortunes under those conditions and with the balance of having paid the other people and Hogwarts in that regions would still have have a million or something like that. That's in the muggle world a region of money where you can life from your interest and will never have to work a single day in your life if you don't want to... and it would still buy lots of books even on the interest alone!
Okay i get it, the Weasleys (please try and write the name the right way next time, okay?) are just hard hearted gold diggers and don't feel too much for Harry... but wouldn't they all the more have reason to PRETEND being sad? At the reading at least? Having them not sooth Hermione in her hour of pain was a nice symbol, blurting out their true allegiances at the reading was more than stupid. Even for Ron. Aren't there any behavior enhancing potions out there to just keep him one hour from his usual foot in mouth disease?
| Giselle Riddle-Malfoy-Potter chapter 8 . 2/6/2013
beautiful fic one of my personal favorites. please continue this
| kiera-sama chapter 8 . 12/2/2012
Oh my goodness. I do hope everyone is okay. I'm sorry this happened to your family. I will be waiting patiently for an update.
| Keena3105 chapter 8 . 11/10/2012
PLEASE PLEASE PLEASE UPDATE THIS FIC SOON! i love it, its actually really different to others that i have read :D please