Reviews for What's in the scroll, The Blade and the Princess
Ultimate Challenge writer chapter 2 . 1/2/2013
Update this awesome story already
Veldrisk chapter 2 . 10/12/2012
Cool story so far. I look forward to seeing who he ends up with and what both his training and sensei are like.
aar60493 chapter 1 . 12/21/2011
awesome, but I have to admit that you have used basically all of this chapter in one of your other fics. There is nothing wrong with that but a change in wording here and there would be appreciated to spice things up.
Manga154 chapter 2 . 7/17/2011
There need to be more story's where Naruto does more stuff like he did in the bar!

Great story so far.
Abyssal Knight chapter 2 . 4/9/2011
Good story just one bad thing for me "Z the Zwordzman" I can't begin to tell how stupid that sounds. I know you're trying to be original but that name is just plan stupid sounding. But still like I said other then that the story is still good.
greenwolf19 chapter 2 . 1/17/2011
Awsome fic especially with naruto tellin off kurani like that XD hope you can write more
Creative Procrastinator chapter 2 . 12/24/2010
This is not a flame. I'm only making observations, opinions and am trying to help a fellow author. Feel free to pm me later.

Okay where to begin. I think you may need to add some point of view notes during your writing. For instance when iruka finds naruto for a while I wasn't sure what was going on. I mean I think naruto was acting dumb for mizuki but he does it so well he seems to forget he's faking it and just stands there. And where did his clones go one second there there in the forrest with him and iruka and then apperently there gone until the spring from the trees at mizuki. Another thing is the sudden seal is broken and his original personality is out. When did the seal break? The next day why does he summon his light clones for seemingly no reason and go smoke in a bar not bothering to drink. (in my experience when people go into a bar, it is usually to drink, be social wile drinking or with drinking people) When he could smoke anywhere. Where did the other sword come from? I realise you may have flash back plans about the sword but many things like this are put offs to some readers. I recommend either making a summary plot or getting a beta reader. You have potential but remember when you have a story in your head you see it at 100% but the first time it's written to the reader it can be at 20% your writing needs to let everyone see your vision

hoping to here from you

the accidental otaku
Maelstorm of the Tricky Wind chapter 2 . 11/1/2010
what is with the teachers name at the end and i like the idea by the way
Myra the Dovahkiin chapter 2 . 11/1/2010
great story. keep writing. update soon. I can't wait to read more! This is getting interesting.
Cloud75JC chapter 2 . 11/1/2010
it sounds interesting ... are you going too have naruto beat down susuke or neji ... hopefully both
Irishfighter chapter 2 . 10/28/2010
Awesome start
Trey of the rebellion chapter 2 . 10/27/2010
Jfitzgerald chapter 2 . 10/27/2010
Please update again soon. Thanks
foxsage chapter 1 . 10/27/2010
Huh... I stopped reading when I read your Author's note, where you started ranting about bashing characters. I never liked character bashing, especially team 7. I find it dumb and irresponsible :( And so, this story probably won't be my type of story that I would read :P

Actually, I should've stopped reading from the way your summary looked like :P This is not a flame, just my opinion :)


Dark Insomniacs chapter 2 . 10/26/2010
good story is this a harem?
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