Reviews for Harry's first time
kurt goodfinger chapter 1 . 2/11
i had 2 go somewhere more privet bc my throbbing bonner would have made my family suspicious. herminee is so hot i wanna put my bonner n her vajena rl bad. oh boy i'm about to cum... hnrggggggggh...anyway love your wrok
Kai chapter 1 . 2/1/2014
So they want to go somewhere private. From the dorm room (that Harry cannot enter, because the stairs turn into a slide and an alarm sounds and summons McGonagall) with the four poster beds where they can easily spell the drapes shut and use a silencing charm; to the COMMON room where they first make light so that anyone who stumbles around can see them and start on the couch in plain sight.
I like a PWP story but the few sentences that are not about gliding genitals should make at least a little sense. Please.
Guest chapter 1 . 2/16/2013
Um maybe your are not cut out to be a um ... author,
If i where you i would find something else to do ... apart from posting on fanfiction.
DarkenCoul chapter 1 . 4/18/2012
I would say get a beta to fix this mess, but honestly I think it'd be better off deleted. Sorry but this is ridiculous.
LadyHeloise chapter 1 . 11/22/2011
Shitty summary, shitty story.
HarryHermioneEdwardBella chapter 1 . 3/12/2011
nice story
GiulietteRose chapter 1 . 2/23/2011

bryan chapter 1 . 7/26/2010
well... to be totally honest this story is just that bit slightly disgusting. i mean this should be age rated what if some kid somewhere was to read it their parents would have a fit lol im 18 and i no all that stuff anyway but thats not the point lol.
chloe wilkinson chapter 1 . 7/8/2010
michael, i love you so much, but i agree with kyran x
kyran pryde chapter 1 . 7/6/2010
mike your a sick perverted little boy :/ im so disgusted in you o(:L
badkidoh chapter 1 . 5/13/2010
It was great.