|Reviews for Love In Desperation? Chapter One|
| horrorcupcake chapter 1 . 4/1
I liked this this is a different twist to the story . Imagine if she dreamed the whole thing and it wasn't real. Or even better yet she was in a coma because it didn't happen and she got put into it instead.
I cant wait to read more of this to see what else you come up with for this story. I don't know why put I can see this happing a little bit. This could be strangely sweet and of course creepy. I hope you get more ideas soon :) Apart from having writers block I think this is a great start to your story.
| LauranTheBiscotti chapter 1 . 9/7/2010
WOw, love with Mary and Collie...never saw that coming !
PLEASE UPDATE SOON !
| Tenukii chapter 1 . 7/30/2010
Quite an odd take on the story... I like the idea of Tak being able to feel love, but this feels kind of rushed. You might want to try taking your time building up the story rather than hurrying through it. Also, you need to work on your grammar and spelling; you tend to use the wrong homophones (words that sound alike): whale instead of wail, flower instead of flour, etc.
This has potential though! An editor or beta reader might be able to help you with it.