|Reviews for Dawn of victory|
| Emziiee-xxx chapter 2 . 10/23/2010
ah ha ha ha lol
Gotta love vampire Willow...Just so crazeh XD
You gonna write another chaoter or is that it? I hope theres more...I wanna see smex between the two...God I'm such a pervert.
| DramaQueenLucy chapter 1 . 7/12/2010
Very interesting I would like to see more and maybe even a back story on what happened to them during their 2 years and how Willow got sired as well as how they managed to stay safe all this time.
Yeah I liked it so much that I want more...lol
| jRobot chapter 2 . 7/7/2010
I don't know if it is just me, but I think Willow's dialogue may be off in a few places in this chapter - sometimes she sounds like Willow when she was alive and sometimes like vampire Will from "Doppelgangland." Maybe that was intentional.
I really appreciate the humour throughout the chapter, and you handled the characters' personalities very well for the most part.
Personally, I would have added a bit more description of the environment. For example, I couldn't tell where Dawn jumped down from to meet Spike.
All in all, a very solid addition to the story, and the last sentence is priceless.
| jRobot chapter 1 . 7/7/2010
I really like the description at the beginning; I can really picture the scene.
This is probably just personal preference, but I think the expatiation on the weapons is slightly too long. It might flow better if you wove it into the story. For example, you could move the description of the submachine guns to after "The slayers put a round each in the hearts of the undead, following it through with their bayonets."
The dialogue fits the characters very well. I love Spike's "Well, if it isn't Carrot-top" as well as his reaction to being considered impotent. Willow's final words conclude the chapter well.
| mikka18 chapter 2 . 6/4/2010
Love this, I'm so interested. Please update :)
| KColl2003 chapter 1 . 5/24/2010
Just like Spike trying to persuade everyone how dangerous he is. Lol.
| Arkeus chapter 1 . 5/13/2010
Poor Willow ;_;
Thanks a lot, this looks good.