I am sad to say I am as possessive as Jasper, and to me sharing your soul mate appears to be abhorrent, especially voyeurism...

Sigh...

I like the fact your British...

Americans being the 'eloquent' (Sarcasm you retarded Americans) idiots they are say 'Drugstore' instead of 'pharmacy'

Though you still use too many American words for my comfort...

If that fucking Queer - Edward - rapes Bella by any chance - IG WEITZ BIEN!

DAMN IT no lemons thanks alot Peter

YAY lemons

he sounds sexist... -_- Just saying

Have you decided to not complete this story?

awaiting the last chapter

I've read this a couple times, and am amused each time at how well you craft the story always overcomes my anger and defiance against the male vampires' perspective. I LIKE possessive, protective, badass males, but I suppose hearing Jasper lay it all out and not giving Bella the right to be 17, insecure or private irks me. Still, I read and re-read and enjoy your story, so you deserve huge kudos. It is DIFFICULT to win over a reader who resents the lead characters; very well done!

One important (to me) correction - and not a criticism, as you have made clear your position on your appreciation for a good beta who helps you with your few issues. In your AN, you say this: " This chapter contains violent scenes and almost non consensual sex. If you are a sensible person or under age please do not read.". The problem is the phrase 'sensible person', which means basically a practical person with common sense. You are stating that anyone with common sense shouldn't read this chapter. The word you want to use is 'sensitive', not 'sensible'. Fear not; I collect typos, writing errors and moments when Autocorrect hijacks our script, and this little error is far from being terrible.

Thanks again for your writing and posting.

This is a really good and interesting take on the story. Please continue to write.

Next chapter?

I just wanted to say I'm sorry. I was being a total bitch after color guard practice and your story is good. I was being an imature 14 year old and sorry for dissing your story. Just want to tell you that don't write in anger. It never ends up with a good ending.

Whats with the submissive bullshit?! Guys arent dominant just cause theyre a guy you fucking moron. Girls can be dominant too. You didnt have to say that every male should be in charge.

More please :)

Love your story! Really hope you get the chance to complete it. :)