Reviews for A Pool Party
Vinland chapter 1 . 1/15/2012
Aww *dies of massive cuteness of this story* do more,aru!~Vinland
IllusionaryMagician chapter 1 . 6/5/2011
Awwh! Cute fluff! _ nice work! That was an enjoyable read!
Soulless chapter 1 . 11/8/2010
Oh my gosh! so adorable amd a great ending! Keep writing!
CameronEmma chapter 1 . 9/25/2010
I didn't read the story yet but you should really break the paragraphs they are to big!

It's kind of discouraging since I'm sure it's a great story but it's hard to read it when it's like that...

The sKapegoat chapter 1 . 5/28/2010
Aw, it is a cute story. I just didn't like the huge paragraph... I had to put it in microsoft word to separate it and such but it was worth the work. 3
FireLadyPhoenix chapter 1 . 5/22/2010
This story was really cute. It was really well written and wonderfully descriptive. However, I do have some advice to improve it. You need to make more paragraphs in this story, one large paragraph turns people off to reading a fanfiction because they think it isn't written well. You also may want to seperate the dialogue from the narration. But besides that, I really liked it and I hope to see more fanfictions from you in the future.

Sincerely yours,