|Reviews for In the heat of the moment|
| HoosierCullen chapter 14 . 3/24/2014
I do hope at some point in time you take up this world and go further. The way you have left the story it begs to be written. That being said this fic was very well done and as with 'Triangle' I found myself enjoying it immensely. I think the way you write the characters is good even with them being OOC at times. I liked the way you show them not being the perfect all together characters some write but flawed and with rough edges. I liked the progression between Harry and Hermione and how their relationship evolved and even Ron falling out of love with Hermione and finding it with Luna who completes him in this story. I think Harry living his life as he was using it as a crutch to express his own self pity was something that he needed to get to where he is with Hermione at the end of the story. Then the way it ended where he finally gave his heart completely to the only woman he could and then come to realize that something he had staring him in the face his whole life since he was eleven is the one thing he really needed but only had to grab it. I know that sounds confusing but that is how I see it. Now with having a stability in his life he can live as he should have before, how Dumbledore wanted him to, with love.
Again great fic and I thank you for writing it.
| CupCakeyyy chapter 14 . 12/30/2013
It would be amazing if you wrote a sequel to this story!
| james.consolidated chapter 14 . 12/8/2013
Well done. Story pacing was nice. I always wanted to hit next to see what was happening next. Ron / Hermione relationship was handled well. The angst between Harry and Hermione was also brilliant. Often I feel that the angst is really 'forced' into the situation just to give the story some interest. In this case that was definately not true. Well done.
| Guest chapter 14 . 11/14/2013
| major wallace chapter 1 . 11/7/2013
| Faram chapter 14 . 7/13/2013
Tack för en otroligt sexig och upphetsande berättelse, mer av deta tack :)
| Crazy Twilight Addict chapter 14 . 7/7/2013
| Cat130 chapter 14 . 7/6/2013
loved the story thank you
| Filmsmith chapter 14 . 7/1/2013
You have a good writing style. I really enjoyed the story, especially the way you matured Ron. Too bad Ron didn't have some of this insight in the canons!
| butalearner chapter 14 . 6/26/2013
Let me preface my review (which always sound harsh) by saying I finished reading your story. If I'm not interested to see what happens next, I stop reading. So, good job! That said, I have two main criticisms:
First, there are way too many flinches and winces going on, and not enough reasons for the characters to do that short of neurological conditions. They certainly belong in there in some places, but in others they wince when even a grimace would have been too much; where a pursing of the lips or tightening of the jaw would be more appropriate (in my opinion). Very occasionally this might have something to do with the events you write about packing more of a wallop in your head than they do on the page, but in general you do well describing the current PoV character's feelings. Mostly I think it's just your over-reliance on that reaction to evoke emotion. When you use it too much, though, it doesn't evoke the right one.
Second, there is a bit too much mind-reading going on. Harry and Hermione know each other well, but the leaps of logic they make in regard to the other's feelings and thoughts are often unrealistic, especially when, at other times, a simple misunderstanding between them causes a big fight. Personally I never switch PoV's mid-scene, because I think that makes it too easy to do that.
Other than that there are just a few spelling and grammatical errors. Off the top of my head, on a few occasions you mixed up homophones (to/too/two), aggravated my personal pet peeve (mixing up lose/loose), hyphenated or split words when you shouldn't have (newlyweds), and it's per se, not per say.
As a final note: this story ends in a good place. There was barely enough conflict here to make it a novella, so there is definitely not enough in Harry settling down to be a father (unless you kill off Hermione in childbirth...). And if you add some external conflict it might as well be its own story. So my vote is no sequel.
Thanks for sharing!
| Jeff chapter 1 . 6/22/2013
This story reminds me of a number of post Hogwarts stories written before HBP came out. I enjoyed these stories because it does not require Ron bashing to see H/Hr together. Everyone's quite OOC, but who cares? Canon Ron and Hermione are so wrong together and its good see them as actual friends as opposed people who wouldn't otherwise associate without having Harry in common.
| quillbee05 chapter 14 . 6/15/2013
| Tears of Deathwishxxx chapter 14 . 6/14/2013
Nice ride. I was glad to see it finished.
| Dessert Maniac chapter 14 . 6/14/2013
Great final chapter! It'd be great if you could do a sequel, but this is just fine.
| Spartan Ninja chapter 14 . 6/14/2013
Better, definitely better. Will there be a sequel eventually?