|Reviews for Seven Deadlies|
| Thescarredman chapter 7 . 9/2/2010
Very good work. Contrary to your professed view, every chapter was a worthwhile read. You provided us with variety and plot twists and backstory, and you didn't even have a storyline1 I'd be very interested to see what you'd come up with if you do a Firefly fic with a beginning, middle, and end.
| RionaEire chapter 7 . 6/29/2010
Good chapter, you write lust pretty well, particularly for Mal and Jayne. I actually thought Kaylee's would be ... lustier? :), more in the heat of the moment? I thought River's was really good because of the way you describe the people's thoughts mingling in certain ways, some indicating couplehood or near to it and some just brushing up against each other in a regular fashion. As for Zoe, that was the best sentence in the whole story: "There was only one thing left to do, and that was Wash", YAY! That was hilarious and fantastic and I heartily encourage it at all available junctures, is it really lust if you're married, because you're totally supposed to feel that way, the more the merrier right? :) I'll keep a look out for your next story.
| RionaEire chapter 6 . 6/29/2010
The sloth/apathy (good interpretation) was good, I felt that Zoe's, Simon's and River's were the best, though I can't find River feeling content sinful, even if it is apathy gleaned from the sleeping corpsified Tracy that brings it to her. I think most of your greed ones were really quite good, I loved how you used the expression "Its all mine" in different ways here. Mal's bit didn't seem very greedy, it was actually ... sort of inspiring? and quite natural. Now for lust.
| Bytemite chapter 5 . 6/27/2010
For Mal's "I can't care" that's kind of how he has to feel about Simon and River's plight at times, or maybe about Inara?
Or maybe about Serenity Valley itself/
| Bytemite chapter 6 . 6/27/2010
Hmm, Nevany's got a good idea in that last review. Since I think we're trying to do the sins in the sense of them being downfalls, maybe Zoe is all conflicted by Wash having to fight in War Stories, maybe blaming herself for what she wants and not being able to let him go, thus putting him into danger. Which then foreshadows what happens later in the franchise.
| Nevany chapter 6 . 6/26/2010
These are pretty good.
Gives an extra insight on the characters. Very Ic too.
For Zoe on Lust, I can't quite recall what ep is was, one of the first few, if I can guess correctly.
But it's where Zoe grabs Wash's shirt and says "I need this man to take off all my clothes" or something along those lines..
Ah, dunno if that maybe War Stories, Zoe seeing Wash fighting like a bad ass?
| casedeputy chapter 6 . 6/26/2010
Loved Mal's part! Lust for Zoe, how about something for War Stories with Wash and her thinking lustful thoughts with him and weapons and being manly.
| Jadzia Bear chapter 6 . 6/26/2010
I'm like a cat, or somethin'. - Hahaha love it!
| Jadzia Bear chapter 5 . 6/26/2010
I love Simon's one. He does so much for River, cares so much, gave up so much, that he must have moments like this where he just doesn't have anything left.
I quite like River's too.
| gpjenk chapter 6 . 6/26/2010
Hi, I'm still enjoying this series and I thought I'd answer your request for help regarding Zoe; Shindig when she mentions the slinky dress, objects in space when river sees them on Zoe and wash on the chair and finally can't remember what episode it's from (I think it's shindig) the scene where wash and zoe are in bed together. Hope this helps
| Gwenfrewi72 chapter 6 . 6/26/2010
So, Zoe and lust. Hmm, maybe go pre-series with her and how after meeting Wash, he bugs her but after a while the lust for the funny little man starts to get to her. BWAHAHAHA!
Greed, loved Mal's the best!
| RionaEire chapter 4 . 6/21/2010
Yes it was pretty wide, doesn't fit the traditional definition of gluttany. I feel the closest ones were Book's power hungriness and Mal's desire for power and revenge on Saffron. The others were a bit of a stretch but still fun to read, I liked how you sort of used my idea for Simon, I suppose you could use the same situation/scene for Kaylee. I look forward to more, oh, and your Jayne voice is really good here.
| Jadzia Bear chapter 4 . 6/19/2010
Another interesting chapter, thanks : )
| gpjenk chapter 3 . 6/14/2010
Ok just finished reading the whole thing and thought I'd leave a review. I think this is a brilliant idea, I've read a couple of fics with this theme before but not a firefly one, I love the fact that you write from several different viewpoints. Are you just going to be writing fromt the main characters or are you going to include others as well such as the operative or Mr universe? (I think Badger is a perfect candidate for greed) any way keep it up.
| IAmTheBadWolf315 chapter 3 . 6/7/2010
Nice fic, can't wait to read more :)