|Reviews for Mother|
| OnexLostxSoul chapter 1 . 12/26/2010
What you have here is an incredible piece that graced my eyes at just the right time, considering my new preoccupation with the scientist figures in FFVII.
An extremely well-executed story. You dig deep into Lucrecia's mind, territory largely unexplored by the game and the fanfiction community. I was enthralled by the emphasis on her visions; they are one of the most fascinating aspects of her character, and this piece explored them with chilling imagery that speaks wonders about your creativity. You bring Lucrecia into an entirely new light. You offer the reader a look into her motivation. Through her perspective we gain valuable insight into Sephiroth as well:
"Thicker than water, blood seeped through the clenched fingers, but the child continued staring at it with a hint of detached curiosity until the shuffling of steps interrupted his contemplation."
An excellent representation, one that sent shivers up my spine!
Lucrecia's inner conflict between the rational and the bizarre was well presented. Hojo's dialogue was superbly written:
"Something? You are a scientist, Lucrecia, and something is not a scientific definition."
I was absolutely absorbed by the time the ending came around, and you certainly concluded with a bang. ;)
| AlexJ69 chapter 1 . 6/3/2010
Wow, I didn't even know you posted this little gem. And here I was thinking that you weren't going to. But I'm glad I did a Genesis search on here, or I would have missed it, and I swear I thought I had you on my author alert list. I probably missed it because of all the stuff going on in my life right now. Anyway...on to the review.
I remember that when I went through this story, that I had to force myself to look for mistakes, (not that there were many) and not just read it for pleasure.
I agree with one of your other reviews that said there has been nothing like this written before, and that's one of the reasons I'm happy you posted it. But another reason is that because it's just a great story. I love how the visions are really affecting Lu, but the one person who should care the most about side effects of working with Jenova cell's, doesn't care. Hoho is such an idiot.
I also really love this story because it doesn't really focus on Lucrecia bonding with her child, though there is a little bit of that in here, but it focuses on the visions and what they are doing to her psyche.
And dear lord, the images of Seph/Gen...stunning, absolutely stunning. But then again, you know how I feel about Sephisis. XD
Everything that happened with Seph, viewed through Lu's POV, even though they are visions, really does have an impact on the rest of the story. That's what I think I like most about this story, well, besides Sephisis of course. XD
Now, I'm not sure I feel bad for her, even if she didn't get to hold her own baby. I mean, she's a scientist for crying out loud, using logic and deductions every day. She knew how Hojo was, and yet she should be surprised and hurt she didn't get to hold Seph? But even more than that, she injected her own baby with a foreign substance, call it the cells of an ancient or an alien, it doesn't matter, she put the cells into her unborn baby, all in the name of experimentation. At that point I really have to wonder is it any surprise that another scientist that she's married to, who's entire world is wrapped around new discoveries, kept her like a prisoner? Is she really shocked he would take the baby? This was Lu's doing as much as it was Hojo's. The visions should have been a sign.
I'm going to conclude by saying this was a fantastic story, because if I don't I will rant again in your review.
I loved this, and can't wait to get my hands on the next chap of Pride.
| CNome chapter 1 . 5/31/2010
I'm glad my words mean so much to you :D I enjoy your replies too!
Wow! I've never read anything like this but I'm glad you wrote it! You really bring Lucrecia to life in this, I've never read a better characterization of her. I also love the contrast of a scientific mind trying to grasp a very supernatural event :D
Hojo also sounded very real: completely scientific, Machiavellian and an utter bastard! "Hojo bent over and brushed her lips with his as if to show some gratitude. Lucrecia closed her eyes tightly. They were always cold, as a touch of death, even when they made love." This especially shows his character well. However I was confused with the next paragraph, I thought at first it was describing Lucrecia and Hojo but then I read "their craving relentless and ardor seeping..." (which couldn't be Hojo/Lucrecia) but I was still confused until I read further and realized she was seeing her son having sex (which has to be mentally scarring-luckily she didn't know it was him).
I was surprised that there wasn't more of Vincent here-shouldn't he either be trying to convince her not to go through with the experimentation or getting experimented on himself?
You paint a very believable portrait of Hojo and Lucrecia's relationship-it's almost enough to make me believe that Hojo could be Sephiroth's father. Normally I find it more realistic if Vincent is the father (I don't care what Square-Enix says, they didn't take Genetics) simply because of the physical resemblence between Sephiroth and Vincent and the total lack of such between Sephiroth and Hojo. Those Jenova cells must have dominated Hojo's puny genes though ;)
"...even the figners." I'm sure you meant fingers.
Excellent one-shot, even better than your last one! The ending was especially good and powerful, I feel sorry for Lucrecia who has only had the chance to see her son as a monster and for Sephiroth whose mother rejected him from birth. You are brilliant for portraying this :D
Now I need to go read the new chapter of "Pride" ;)
P.S. Your English is getting much better!
| Archisham chapter 1 . 5/28/2010
Можно я тебя затискаю?
Красота! Все больше и больше восхищаюсь как ты прописываешь характеры и с какой легкостью пишешь главы!
Единственное я не понимаю механизм предвидения будущего. Если будущее еще не свершилось, то как его можно увидеть. Если оно уже свершилось, то получается Гайя застывшая система, не развивающаяся. Ну не Гайя, а вообще мир вокруг и она в том числе.
В каноне эти ее видения создают ощущение предопределенности.
Вспоминаю нечто вроде поучительной истории, так вот там старика спрашивают "Неужели ты видишь будущее?, а он отвечает, что видит предпосылки, ниточки, которые ведут к тем или иным событиям.
| sphinxofthenile chapter 1 . 5/24/2010
So, I stole away from my lovely book of macroeconomics (note the sarcasm) to read this, and wow. Definitely loving what you did here, darling, it has a very powerful atmosphere and the concept is brilliantly executed. I liked especially how you linked in game events, especially the last one where Lucretia finally realises what she had done. An amazing piece from you, as usual.
Now, back to the interest rates... ewww.
| NinjaSheik chapter 1 . 5/23/2010
Scary, but AWESOME!
| SherrySummer chapter 1 . 5/23/2010
Yet again I’m impressed by your ability to delve into a character. You did great job describing Lucrecia’s growing anxiety and desperation during her pregnancy. The moment she agreed to Hojo’s scientific experiment involving their son, she lost all her rights as a mother, and that was what she came to realise in the end. Her son was not a human. He didn’t belong to her. I think it was better for Sephiroth that she died after giving him a birth. What kind of mother would she have made when she saw her child as a demon? I doubt very much Sephiroth would have been flattered to have a mother like her, too weak to fight for her son or even to accept him as who he truly is and will become. Anyway, it was beautifully written and made a good reading. :)