|Reviews for Valentines Day|
| Penny Tall chapter 1 . 5/23/2010
Should be rate T
| JJJelly chapter 1 . 5/23/2010
loved it :)
| juniperwing chapter 1 . 5/23/2010
(1)The multiple author notes in the middle of paragraphs are really annoying, and they pull the reader away from the story.
(2)Violet is a mary-sue
(3)There are a lot of grammar mistakes
(4)Lily seems OOC
(5)The story moves rather fast
It was written rather decently compared to a lot of other fics I've read.
Sorry if I seem like a bitch in this review.
| Pelahnar chapter 1 . 5/23/2010
I liked it - kind of interesting to see how Lily feel in love with James, though didn't Lupin say they'd started dating in sixth year?
Whatever. The one thing I must mention - the wizard money is galleons, not gallons. I wouldn't mention it at all, but I spent half the story thinking '2 gallons? 2 gallons of what? Butterbeer? Fire Whiskey?' And of course, that took me away from the story.
Other than that, it was really good.
| Lady Elizabeth of New York chapter 1 . 5/23/2010
I have a few words to say to you. DO NOT PUT AUTHORS NOTES ANYWHERE IN THE STORY!
Sorry, had to get that out.
Something about this story just seems off.
Everything is going too fast. Lily seems out of character. I suggest you look over the story again or get a beta reader.