|Reviews for If You Only Knew|
| Aliegator2014 chapter 21 . 2/8
This is such a good story please update
| nbrian72 chapter 21 . 3/18/2014
I really like the story looking foward to more.
| eb chapter 21 . 2/10/2014
pls write fast
| barbiedoll123 chapter 1 . 10/1/2012
| TheTabbieCat chapter 21 . 8/29/2012
It took me ages to finally get around to read this and now I'm glad I didn't put it off any longer, it made me smile. Really good and I hope you update again soon because I can't wait for more.
| luvulotsE.B chapter 21 . 8/17/2012
Next chapter can't wait
| kikichugirl chapter 21 . 8/10/2012
Hey, I love your story!
I actually found it through one of the top Twilight communities (Pregnant Bella and Dad-Ward) and it's exceptionally good... so I'm adding it to my (albeit after my picky selection) own community too.
It's nice to see you update. I think you are a great writer and I love how you create plot twists as well as a sense of mystery to keep readers engaged.
As for your question at the end of this chapter...
A) Bella lies to Esme. Esme insists that they should meet... because that's how she rolls. Bella meets up with Edward and Bella is forced to admit that she lied.
B) Bella tells the truth, that Edward is her boyfriend and they were best friends before. Esme gushes on about Edward and they talk about him. Bella feels guilty for leaving him behind. Esme asks a ton of questions that Bella can't answer. Bella becomes a family friend and insists that Bella and Edward hang out together sometime or go to dinner with Edward's parents.
C) Bella tells the truth, but tells them that they aren't on friendly terms anymore. Esme asks why. Things get awkward.
Personally, as a writer I think A is more likely, but B is more useful to the plot I guess. They do need to make up some time and Ryan needs his Dada :) However, Bella can't really face Edward until she knows the danger is either over... or obviously showing up.
I do have a suspicion that Renata and the Volturi cousins are related to Ryan somehow... and that the fact that Ryan looks like Bella is a major plot point, the key to figuring out the mystery.
I see a few minor errors - you forgot to put a period there, a comma there, accidentally capitalized some stuff there, so just make sure you either have a beta check it over or double-check before you post :)
As for capitalizing in and around quotes, make sure you only put a comma and lowercase the next letter if it has something to do with how it was said: ie-
"I'm sorry, Bella," whispered Edward. NOT "I'm sorry, Bella." Whispered Edward. (or some combination of the two)
OR, you use:
"I'm sorry, Bella." Edward put his head into his hands. NOT "I'm sorry Bella," Edward put his head into his hands.
You still don't use a comma if the quote goes at the end or something: NO "Edward put his head into his hands, "I'm sorry, Bella." because it doesn't have anything to do with how Edward is saying it... it has to do with what he's doing while he's saying it, not HOW.
Okay, sorry for my lengthy explanation if you didn't get it :P It's just that those are one of the most commonly made mistakes on the entire site... and it's much, much easier to read when people don't make them xD
It's nice to see that you've not given up on such a lovely story.
| soniya11 chapter 21 . 8/5/2012
| vampdreams chapter 21 . 7/22/2012
please do continue...
i don't think i can take sad bella and edward anymore
plz bring them together
all rest they can handle
| angleface12 chapter 21 . 7/18/2012
i love this story will edward come after them please say yes ryan needs his daddy
| francescafab chapter 21 . 7/18/2012
Update, update, update!
| Tinas31 chapter 21 . 7/18/2012
Oh what is she going to say? Where is Edward? Doesnt he want to see Ryan?
| angelplusbuffyequals4ever chapter 21 . 7/17/2012
i'll stick to it until the end. I don't think bella will lie to esme. She'll reply that she worked with him and thats it.
| Blueeyedloser chapter 21 . 7/16/2012
I love this story! It's wonderful.
I feel bad for poor Edward. I think that he should show up to this little party ;)!
Please update soon, I'll be waiting!
| rolozano chapter 21 . 7/13/2012
Thanks for teh chapter is so good to have you back! please dont stop writing we are her ewait for an update!