Reviews for Family Ties
SugarTea chapter 1 . 6/2/2010
Wow… An interesting take on Vesta and Celia’s personality! O.O Stories like yours are exactly why I love fanfiction! :] You’re excellent at writing drama, and I can’t wait to read more from you! Good luck in the contest!
SweetieLove chapter 1 . 6/1/2010
VERY GOoD! The intensity sent me chills and the way you showed Celia's personality was blended together with Marlin's. Your writing style is subject meaning it required lots of focus...A little more work with drama and you're all set!

Good luck in the contest!
Awesome Rapidash chapter 1 . 5/25/2010
Wow, who knew Vesta could be so devious! That was certainly an interesting take on this months theme though. I guess family is family no matter how it comes to be.

I liked your story but had a couple of minor nit picks. First in my opinion you overused Celia's name. I'm sure you could come up with some alternatives besides just her name. Second some of the paragraphs seemed a bit long. I got confused a couple of times and had to back-track a bit to clarify what was happening.

Nice job and good luck in the contest!
high improbability chapter 1 . 5/25/2010
Oh, Vesta, you're such a good older sister and a wonderful matchmaker. 8D

Good luck in the contest!