Reviews for The Outlaw
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 8 . 5/17
Pretty shitty story. I don't really believe that the British military and law enforcement all just evaporated and left the country completely defenseless to marauding thieves, thugs, organized criminals and beasts. You really need a more credible threat than dragons when Muggles clearly have air superiority. In your story the military and the law enforcement just aren't there, without explanation. A highly infectious disease with no known cure that turns Muggles into inferi would be much more believable. And your story ends on a pretty depressing note with barely a glimmer of hope. You should have made The Marauder and this one a single story of 13 chapters instead of a two part series of 85 chapters. There's just not enough meat in the two stories for more than one meal.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 6 . 5/17
There is a lack of believability to your story because surely the British military would have been able to see the dragons on their radar and intercepted them in the air long before they got to London. And surely they have enough anti-aircraft firepower to take out hundreds or even thousands of dragons. Same with the Muggle governments of continental Europe. NATO airpower would have been scrambled as soon as the dragons crossed the Romanian border.
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 5 . 5/17
What happened to the undersecretary that we love to hate, Dolores Umbridge?
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 3 . 5/17
Dragons live in a reserve, not a preserve. A dragon preserve would be deviled canned dragon flesh used as a spread on toast, like jam!
GodricGeoffreyGryffindor chapter 2 . 5/17
Actually, the Ministry can't locate magic done at an unplottable location. How this works is not defined, but clearly if a place is unplottable then coordinates for it must come up undefined in a trace, otherwise it could be plotted manually if by no other means. 12 Grimmauld Place is also under the fidelius charm, so even its existence is a secret that can only be revealed by Dumbledore. Since the fidelius charm can't remove 12 Grimmauld Place physically into Dumbledore's soul, then it must work at the level of perception to hide all evidence of the secret. It must confound anyone who would attempt to discover the secret by any means other than asking the secret keeper and present them with the illusion that it doesn't exist.
pixelherodev chapter 2 . 4/21
And why did Voldy want animal -oh, sorry, _pureblood_, supremacy? He was a freaking halfy!
Futurist chapter 1 . 5/2/2015
Not sure why you would stick to the most ridiculous pairing in the books...
Hr/R makes me gag, I will endeavor to persevere.
Lady Nyshah chapter 8 . 3/26/2015
Why didn't he called dobby to him or ask for a free house elf to come to him?
GBTtown chapter 8 . 11/15/2013
I guess it is best to classify this as a multi-crossover. Enjoyable to read and I hope the sequel is coming soon.
Tomon chapter 8 . 10/25/2013
Interesting story. Reign of Fire as awesome movie and this mix really get the world spinning in different direction.
bill560682 chapter 8 . 9/22/2013
now wizards taking over would not be hard, muggle repelling spells and illusions can go far. you put muggle repelling wards on the storehouses of food and illusions to make it look like an unsafe burnt out shell and you use muggle repelling wards on houses and go block by block cleaning out the whole town. then you put up muggle repelling wards on the rock wall fences on the farms around the town and in as little as a week your family now owns 1,000 houses and 10,000 acres of farm land. an if you do this to 2 towns you can trade town number 2 to someone else for some of their house elves to work your fields. an if you do not want to give up town number 2 you could always use muggleborns as slave labor, just take a dog collar an put it on your new slave and add the strongest compulsion charm you can as well as a notice-me-not charm to the collar. an since you now have 2 whole towns you then very likely have at least one library with books on growing crops. if the wizards really tried they could sweep from one end of the country to the other in one long line using muggle repelling spells to retake the whole country. they could march arm in arm side by side covered in muggle repelling charms and force the muggles out of the country then just line the shores with illusion spells and notice-me-not spells and muggle repelling spells so that the muggles think the island is a wasted rock.
bill560682 chapter 7 . 9/22/2013
you can own guns in england but only for hunting so rifles and shotguns.
bill560682 chapter 6 . 9/22/2013
why not have voldimort use time turners to tell his younger self about the outcome of attacks an that way he wins every fight.

why do the wizards keep mass murderers in prison instead of giving them the kiss? yes i know if they did that then sirius would have been dead years ago before meeting harry, it also gives voldimort a ready made army once he breaks everyone out. these do NOT cover real reasons that you could give the wizarding public thou. personally i think they have a secret pureblood breeding program going on to make sure the pureblood lines do not die out. think about it people like to give sirius a daughter he never knew about in stories so she had to come from some place?

if wards are so easy for curse breakers who work for voldimort to get threw on peoples homes how come hogwarts has not been gotten into and wiped out long ago? an no voldimort does not fear dumbledore otherwise he would not have stuck around hogwarts all of harry's first year or his second year which proves not even young tom riddle feared dumbledore.

how come voldimort never had harry potter kidnapped and killed while he was in hogsmeade or diagon alley or the hogwarts express? just send someone in as the trolly lady and kill potter and his friends on the train. why not go after harry at his 'home' he went to muggle school before hogwarts so people had to know where he was at to fix things like accidental magic such as turning his teachers wig blue. they had to know where he was at to send people to fix aunt marge when harry blew her up. an when the weasley family showed up threw the floo someone in that department had to know.

how come voldimort never seems to use a pensive to veiw attacks so he can know who works for dumbledore and attack them and thereby cut dumbledores forces. members of the order have normal jobs so killing them would be no problem.
bill560682 chapter 5 . 9/21/2013
now if i were harry i would get my hands on as much of my gold as i could, the reason being fudge is blaming harry for the attack on the ministry so SOMEONE has to pay for that namely harry so fudghe would likely claim everything that belonged to harry to cover the costs to the ministry.

how come when harry becomes head of a family he does not find out about secret vaults that the family kept part of it's money. these people are taught about goblin wars from the moment they start school so they would not trust goblins with everything they own.
bill560682 chapter 4 . 9/21/2013
if bill is such a great curse breaker then he should also be great at putting them up as well? so why was it so easy to attack the weasley family home in cannon? yes i know they used portkeys that likely were for wedding guests but it should not have been that easy. they should have had check points to get people there, you check in here and get a new portkey to station 2 then 3 the to the party.
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