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leonarcs chapter 35 . 2/4 it's criminal that you would never continue this history. I hate you so much but at the same time I love you and this history. maybe when mass effect 5 come up you can finish the rest of the history |
Sa chapter 35 . 1/8 I can't get this out of my head. That ending man... That was incredible. What a send off. Such a shame you won't ever expand on it. I only really hated it when Shepard kept saying Garrus was better than him etc and how he was useless on the Reaper base. I doubt Garrus or anyone else on his team could do anything like what he does in the 3rd game lol. Especially since you're literally twice as powerful as every other squadmate since you're the only one that can stack abilities like that. Shepard is pretty much matchless in all 3 games and the entire Galaxy unites around him for it. A simple "I trust that you will do well" would suffice. Ah well. Maybe I'll find another fanfic where Tali retains her normal submissiveness, Shepard's confidence doesn't snap and we actually see a proper ending. Still though, doubt anyone will make a well-tuned story like this one that inserts Tali as the primary romance from ME1 onwards. |
Sa chapter 35 . 1/8 Wow. So that's it then. What a brilliant story. I'm amazed. In a way, you could easily write this into the canon of ME3 by saying that Anderson decided to contact them in regards to a 6 month long trial going over everything. You could even say they were about to sentence him as guilty right as the Reapers came to earth. Same starting mission just now with Shepard in prisoner garb. Of course this would massively alter the course of the game itself and Shepard would probably not get reinstated until other worlds started dying and people woke up to everything he was saying was all true. Tuchunka, allied with Shepard. Geth, the Quarians, all allied with him as they try to bargain peace with the other council races. Maybe even try to ally with both the Elcor, Hanar and Volus. God knows they needed more spotlight in ME3. It would be the entire universe against the council and they would eventually need to cave. Probably accept all of the races onto the Council and thus would begin many of the major plot points besides Priority Rannoch I suppose. Guess all that time fighting Geth would be put to finding a surrogate D protein sperm to modify with Shepard's DNA Whatever the case, hopefully you finish this one day. Perhaps ME4 will inspire you to continue it. Unless they totally void Tali in which case I hope to see you rioting with me at Cerberu- I mean - Bioware HQ. Goodluck and thank you for this excellent piece of work. |
Guest chapter 32 . 1/8 Fk it. It's not like anyone's gonna read my word slop creative outburst headcanon anyways. Here's an edited version; "With that, the quarians prepared to leave. One of the marines picked up the bag full of Rannoch samples as the others began exiting the room. Admiral Koris did not. "May I have a moment with you, Tali'Zorah?" he asked before she left with the Admirals and the others. Shepard heard this and instantly recalled the tail end of the trial. The anger that had kept him safe, kept him healthy, the rage he relied on during his childhood started to bubble it's way to the surface but visibly to the others, he made no reaction besides for the balled-up fist in his right hand clutched at the wrist by his left hand held behind his back tightening. His face remaining stoic and calm with a confident smile as he watched the Admirals and their guards leave, the same expression he kept for the majority of the meeting. Soon, it was just the Commander who was left to leave as the last soldier made his way out the door and he unclenched his fist as he started moving towards the side of the room Koris stood as if to exit. Slowly he approached the Admiral, eyes not even looking at him as he did, the expression on his face never changing. Koris was watching him the entire time, somewhat nervous as he recalled his brazen threat Shepard hailed upon the Migrant Fleet after Tali's sentencing. Soon Shepard came within arms reach of him and placing one step in front of the other, he blinked and his smile dropped off of his face as Shepard looked into the glowing white eyes behind the mask of the Admiral. His brow furrowed, his jaw clenched, a vein crept it's way onto his forehead and now he looked wide-eyed, crazy, as if he was ready to unleash the entire crew of the Normandy on his ship. Shepard stopped as he was shoulder-to-shoulder with the obviously nervous Admiral. Koris had to look up at the 6'2 Commander as almost eveey Quarian is about 5'8 tall, a staple height even among the men. Koris knew exactly how dangerous this man was and he also knew how easy it would be for Shepeard to kill him instantly, right here, isolated from the rest of the Admirals. For the first time in his life, Admiral Zaal'Koris vas Qwib-Qwib felt like prey; like a deer caught in the headlights of an approaching vehicle. A few painstaking seconds of silence passed as he stared up at the large human. The tension was unbearable and Koris would remember this moment to be possibly the worst 5 seconds of his life. Finally, Shepard leaned in until his mouth was near the left side of Koris's head and placed one hand on his left shoukder. He froze on the spot as he didn't dare to react to this obvious sign of aggression. Shepard grumbled something, too quiet for Tali to hear but something that was almost painfully loud for Koris. "Make her cry again and I'll break your neck." Shepard's voice was low, laced with anger and Koris could practically feel the eyes of the former human Spectre boring into the left side of his head as he spoke. Koris said nothing but silently gulped as Shepard's hand remained gripping his skinny shoulder tightly. Too frightened to even notice it until now. He wanted nothing more than to wipe the sweat off of his brow, having been threatened by possibly the most talented soldier in the galaxy. But instead he settled for a quick nod, not even daring to look into his eyes. Shepard, satisfied, released his grip, straightened himself and placed his hands behind his back once again as he began to leave. The warm, calm and confident smile returning to his once again. Terrifying. Tali remained in the room as she watched this happen. She didn't know what Shepard said but the wide pale eyes behind Koris's visor staring into the spot where Shepard once stood said everything she needed to know and Tali bit her lip as she looked at her domineering sexy fiance leave through the only door in the room. She'll have to think of a way to reward him later. Soon it was just the two of them and Koris returned his gaze to Tali who did the same to him and felt the sexiness of her commander wash away, still however having a smirk laden on her face behind her mask. Koris straightened his back and recomposed himself with an ahem, clearing his throat and gathering his thoughts. "What is it you want?" Tali asked. Her voice had a tone of impatience. And with good reason; despite the meeting they were just in, this was still the man who was responsible for her exile. She did not care for him. Koris hesitated before responding. Obviously still shaken by what Shepard said." |
Guest chapter 32 . 1/8 I messed up with a few typos. Wish this website had an edit message option haha |
Guest chapter 32 . 1/8 I wrote in some things to this chapter that I thought it needed. Just a little addition which adds some flavour to the scene with Koris and Tali. "With that, the quarians prepared to leave. One of the marines picked up the bag full of Rannoch samples as the others began exiting the room. Admiral Koris did not. "May I have a moment with you, Tali'Zorah?" he asked before she left with the Admirals and the others. Shepard heard this and instantly recalled the tail end of the trial. The anger that had kept him safe, kept him healthy, the rage he relied on during his childhood started to bubble it's way to the surface but made visibly to the others, he made no reaction besides for the balled-up fist in his right hand clutched at the wrist by his left hand held behind his back tightening. His face remaining stoic and calm with a confident smile as he watched the Admirals and their guards leave, the same expression he kept for the majority of the meeting. Soon, it was just the Commander who was left to leave as the last soldier made his way out the door and he unclenched his fist as he started moving towards the side of the room Koris stood as if to exit. Slowly he approached the Admiral, eyes not even looking at him as he did, the expression on his face never changing. Koris watching was him the entire time, somewhat nervous as he recalled his brazen threat Shepard hailed upon the Migrant Fleet after Tali's sentencing. Soon Shepard came within arms reach of him and placing one step in front of the other, he blinked and his smile dropped off of his face as Shepard looked into the glowing white eyes behind the mask of the Admiral. His brow furrowed, his jaw clenched, a vein crept his way onti his forehead and now he looked wide-eyed, crazy, as if he was ready to unleash the entire crew of the Normandy on his ship. Shepard stopped as he was shoulder-to-shoulder with the obviously nervous Admiral. Koris had to look up at the 6'2 Commander as almost eveey Quarian is about 5'8 tall, a staple height even among the men. Koris knew exactly how dangerous this man was and he also knew how easy it would be for Shepeard to kill him instantly, right here, isolated from the rest of the Admirals. For the first time in his life, Admiral Zaal'Koris vas Qwib-Qwib felt like prey; like a deer caught in the headlights of an approaching vehicle. A few painstaking seconds of silence passed as he stared up at the large human. The tension was unbearable and Koris would remember this moment to be possibly the worst 5 seconds of his life. Finally, Shepard leaned in until his mouth was near the left side of Koris's head and placed one hand on his left shoukder. He froze on the spot as he didn't dare to react to this obvious sign of aggression. Shepard grumbled something, too quiet for Tali to hear but something that was almost painfully loud for Koris. "Make her cry again and I'll break your neck." Shepard's voice was low, laced with anger and Koris could practically feel the eyes of the former human Spectre boring into the left side of his head as he spoke. Koris said nothing but silently gulped as Shepard's hand remained gripping his skinny shoulder tightly. Too frightened to even notice it until now. He wanted nothing more than to wipe the sweat off of his brow, having been threatened by possibly the most talented soldier in the galaxy. But instead he settled for a quick nod, not even daring to look into his eyss and Shepard, satisfied, released his grip, straightened himself and placed his hands behind his back once again as he began to leave, the warm, calm and confident smile returning to his once again. Terrifying. Tali remained in the room as she watched this happen. She didn't know what what Shepard said but the wide pale eyes behind Koris's visor staring into the spot where Shepard once stood said everything she needed to know and Tali bit her lip as she looked at her domineering sexy fiance. She'll have to think of a way to reward him later. Soon it was just the two of them and Koris returned his gaze to Tali who did the same to him and felt the sexiness of her commander wash away, still however having a smirk laden on her face behind her mask. Koris straightened his back and recomposed himself with an ahem, clearing his throat and gathering his thoughts. "What is it you want?" Tali asked. Her voice had a tone of impatience. And with good reason; despite the meeting they were just in, this was still the man who was responsible for her exile. She did not care for him. Koris hesitated before responding. Obviously still shaken by what Shepard said. " |
Sa chapter 31 . 1/7 Nvm she hated that she couldn't be with him. Not the fact that he was kind itself. I wish I didn't write reviews blackout tired |
Guest chapter 31 . 1/7 Hated it? But in the earlier chapters she vocalised in her head that she enjoyed Shepard being nice to her. I think it was quote "the first time someone has been nice to me" or something along those lines. Never once has she said she hated it. Plothole? |
Sa chapter 31 . 1/7 Hated it? But in the earlier chapters she vocalised in her head that she liked it? |
Sa chapter 30 . 1/7 I'm not gonna lie. That was incredible. |
Guest chapter 29 . 1/7 This just suddenly became a fking heist novella and I'm all for it |
BoganZ chapter 35 . 5/5/2023 I absolutely adored your story. This has some of my favorite Tali and Shepard interactions from all of the stories I've read on this site so far. Also love how it starts at ME1 unlike any of the others I've which tend to start at ME2 or later. I like how you changed it so Tali/Shepard developed feelings for each other during the Saren adventure, the way you wrote them made it feel very natural. And since Tali canonically falls in love with Shepard early on it just makes a lot of sense to write a story with that in mind. Super feel good story all around, it made me smile a lot. A little unfortunate it wasn't fully completed with your vision in mind but I think it ended off on a high note which is satisfying enough after how much enjoyment it gave me. Thanks for writing the wonderful story, I loved it. |
jblock1 chapter 35 . 4/10/2023 Loved this story. Thank you |
Sage of Discord chapter 35 . 3/9/2023 I just found this story the other day (way late, I know), and though I'm disappointed you chose not to continue it through ME3, the choices you made here for the back half made up for that. Very original and highly entertaining. |
Austin Leonard chapter 35 . 10/8/2022 Thank you for writing such a wonderful story |