I have no idea why, but after someone gets tired of neville calling them by their last name, have them call him "SHORTASS!" He would have a heart attack!

Meant to tell you in the previous review - I cried at more at Charlie's death and Harry, Ron, Hermione, and Ginny's reaction than I did at the deaths of Fred, Remus and Tonks in Deathly Hallows II - well done! - RA

It's funny. After years away from HP fanfiction I've wandered back to read my favorite stories again. I blame it on the movies being over now. I remember authors and titles for the most part, or I remember plotlines but not who wrote them, so I was trolling the Sugarquill (thank god for bookmarks!)and that brought me in a round about way back to and your stories.

Imagine my surprise when I see my pen name mentioned in a thank you in one of your chapters for an idea that I gave you. I knew I had read the story before, but I didn't remember all the details, so seeing that was fun. I am definitely enjoying this story again. Oh the good times of H/G stories. I hadn't realized - at the time - all the turmoil that was going on in the community, I was just enjoying the stories!

Congrats on becoming a published author! I've always thought about it, and I have a cople ideas, but I've never followed through - yet. I just have too much fun playing with other people's toys I guess. Please let me know your pen name and if you know the title and publish date yet. I will definitely pick it up!

Cheers - RogueAngel

Epic :D

I have finished the story, and I must say, I am impressed. I do not say this often about fanfic authors, but you have a lot of talent. Most of the stories that I see on this website are very poorly written. Those few that I like are still usually only on the good end of mediocre. I would characterize this story as high quality.

That said, your story is not perfect. Overall, the grammar and spelling were excellent. I always expect a few errors in fanfiction, and can usually gloss over them if they are not too numerous. Please don't think that I am saying your betas did a bad job. Quite the opposite. They did a great job, but it still needs improvement.

One of the most common pitfalls that writers can have is over-reliance on Spell Check. While spelling errors can easily be removed in most cases, sometimes the way you misspelled the word is also a word. For example, "eel" and "heel" are both words. They are also both nouns. If you run spelling and grammar checks it will not be picked up. That is why it is important to have someone read through the story and make a note every time they come across this. It is even better if the person is not familiar with the story. That way, they are less likely to gloss over any errors. Still, you did not have very many of this kind of error, but when they do occur, it can severely disrupt the flow of the story.

To sum things up, I think you did an excellent job. Your characters were believable, and true to canon as of the time it was written. Some minor errors, and one slight inconsistency. The story ended making the reader want more, and a sequel was promised, and as of the time of this post, it has been completed. Thank you for sharing your talent with the world.

Just a short note, I will give a full review when I am done with the whole story.

In chapter 9, about two thirds of the way through, you refer to Snape patrolling the halls when at the time he was not currently teaching there.

The paragraph I am referring to is:

He took her hand again, keeping the Marauder's Map in the other, so that if Filch or Snape should be patrolling the corridors, they wouldn't have a nasty surprise. Harry took Ginny down to the fourth floor, where he remembered there was a sort of storage room. The room contained some disused pieces of furniture from the various common rooms, and Harry was rather surprised to see that the map indicated it was empty. It seemed a fairly ideal place to take a girl, and Harry had to assume that not very many students knew of its existence.

Not a big deal, but just something to note.

So far, I really like the story!

Was the Monty reference the password, Semprini?

Sport-flavored cereal? Yum. Nothing like adrenaline, cleaning supplies, and sweat in the morning. O.o

Loved the story hated the ending

I guessed that Krum was a soul searcher the moment Ginny said that it felt like he was looking through her.

Other than that, great job!

So do the gems Ginny makes glow on their own like the Silmarils? Or are they different? I know that Ginny's gem is different from the Silmarils in many ways, including the ability to protect, but the Silmarils also burned some people; such as when Carcaroth bit off Beren's hand while he was holding the Silmaril he had carved from Morgoth's crown, and Carcaroth went mad from the pain of the Silmaril.

Did the idea of dots above certain consinents indicating vowels come from Tolkien as well?

Also, how do you view Voldemort? I view him sort of like Saruman, and not Sauron, becasue of his lacky, Wormtongue... tail, you catch my meaning.

Loving the story!

CT

What is with that book?

CT

Its a bit much to believe that Harry is seventeen and doesn't recognize a crush or being turned on by a girl when it happens. Granted, he was that oblivious in canon, but just because the source material makes a mistake doesn't mean you have to follow suit.

That was AMAZING

Dude this is AMAZINGLY GOOD this could be the alternate 7th book