|Reviews for Kelsier's Tale: The Pits of Hathsin|
| Hermione Ivory Weasley chapter 9 . 8/22/2014
It's so interesting to see elements from all the books being applied to Kelsier's past. Please keep working on this.
| Terrence chapter 8 . 8/17/2014
Why didn't you keep going?! This is so good and so interesting!
| zoe alice chapter 1 . 12/7/2010
I really can't keep track of the story because of the run-on sentences. Sorry. It looks promising anyway.
| ThriceJinxed chapter 6 . 11/24/2010
Great story you should totally continue:)
| sylvie-morose chapter 4 . 8/17/2010
Okay, I've got a few statements; you already know that run-on sentences are a bit of a problem for you, and that either you need to be on the look out for them when you write, or you need a beta-reader. But you've got the story down - that's good.
I'm surprised by the magnitude of effect the Pits have on Kelsier. I'm not sure if I like it or not, but you have a good challenge for him to overcome. Now he's questioning his sanity, there's pressure building up between the skaa... good setup for a plot twist.
Another thing that surprises me is Kelsier's choice to ignore Mare. I can understand that she 'betrayed' him, but I'm not sure it's in Kelsier's character to hurt the ones he loves. I can see how the questionable sanity, the memories, etc., could influence him to make that choice, yet I kind of want to see him triumph through to Mare.
But I don't know what you're planning, so maybe it will all make sense later. Anyway, I'll keep watching, and see where you go with this. Good luck!
| sliz225 chapter 3 . 7/29/2010
Great story, I love hearing a story from Kelsier's perspective. My only note-watch the run-on sentences! Please update soon, though!
| Rydd Rider chapter 3 . 7/20/2010
Still liking the story! update soon! I like the quotes at the beginning of each chapter. I don't recall any of them actually being in the books, but they sound like something each of the characters would say.
| Rydd Rider chapter 2 . 7/14/2010
I like the story's idea, it has promise, but I think you need a beta reader. There were a lot of grammar errors that could be fixed to make it a better story. Keep writing though, I'll keep track of this!
| sylvie-morose chapter 2 . 6/30/2010
I like the quote at the beginning; it's cute.
I'm not sure what I think about the OCs, but I haven't spent much time with them, so... I honestly thought Tristan was gonna last longer, but apparently not. That's good, keeps the readers on their toes.
Keep going, I want to see what you've got planned for Kelsier.
| sylvie-morose chapter 1 . 6/21/2010
Well, I am certainly keeping track of this story. There's a few grammar issues, but I like the premise. Kelsier in the Pits of Hathsin - and I'll say, I looked for any slips where Kelsier used Allomancy, and none caught my notice, so kudos to you for remaining accurate to the story!
One last thing: Is that quote at the top, from Mare, actually in the book? I really would like to know.
Good story, and please continue!