Reviews for an inkling of perfection undone
cdcase chapter 1 . 4/4/2011
AMAZING, AMAZING, AMAZING. fav

Without using lewd words, I'd hardly call this a 'smut' fic. It had some kinky elements, to be sure, but there was a well-written understanding and development between the characters. It had an almost spiritual bonding between two awesome prosecutors.

This is how the FranxMiles pairing should be, and you captured it beautifully: they both still suffer the repercussions of having an overbearing mentor/father, they both need each other, they are hesitant at first but then they melt.

I got the feeling here that they were both acting out more of a too-late-rebellion than actual celebration of their freedom. Perhaps you can explore what they really mean to each other in another fanfic? It would be absolutely wonderful if you wrote more, like another one of these taking place after AA:I.

Pwease? Pretty pwease? *bakes cookies for you*
aihaibara91 chapter 1 . 1/23/2011
I loved how you described feelings, thoughts...this is more than simple smut 3
Madame Poppy chapter 1 . 8/6/2010
D: I love you? Yes? ;w; I wish I had this talent when I wrote my first smut fic. . My inadequate hands kept pressing delete whenever I wrote anything explicit. DX
sakuramae chapter 1 . 7/6/2010
Haaa, I usually try to avoid smutfics when I'm in a tasteful mood (which is most of the time), but this was not something I expected at all! It was beautifully done, and teasingly tasteful! And I can't help be biased to this pairing, especially when I've now just gotten through the last of the three Phoenix Wright games.

I absolutely love the style, btw, it read so smoothly. Like BUTTAH.
RigorMortisGirl chapter 1 . 6/13/2010
HOLY FLYING SHEEP IN A SHIPWRECK!

This was beautiful! And it's so very rare to find Miles/Franziska, especially so well written!

You kept them both so wonderfully in character, and I keep trying to think of things to say that make this more critique than fangirly gushing, but you did so well, I can't! D:

I especially enjoyed the parenthesis. :D

Keep up the good work!
nezstereo chapter 1 . 6/5/2010
this was awesooooooome! Some of the best smut of Miles and Franziska I've ever seen...and definitely one of my favorite fics of them. I love how poetic you are, it adds a lot to the story.

Oh my gosh write more
risenfromash chapter 1 . 6/3/2010
Wow! This was your first ever smut writing? That's pretty amazing. It was really good and I love Miles inner thoughts.
Rubymuto chapter 1 . 6/3/2010
i think von karma would turn in his grave if he saw what they were doing to each other.

Franziska and edgeworth are such a lovely couple.

if this fic is more than a one shot i look forward to the next chapter.
Hakurei Ryuu chapter 1 . 6/2/2010
whee smut-fic-porn! D

i like how it's all artsy and stream-of-conciousness and the like. not that i'd expect anything else from DEEP SHIT writing and all. P for your next forray, might i suggest something a little more graphic? don't get me wrong, i love this. but it's not really porn if there's characterization and whatnot. for porn, you talk more about their physical state than their mental. ;P

HEARTS IT MUCH!
Indochine chapter 1 . 6/2/2010
Absolutely nice story. Your smut was quite good actually, and I love how you managed to put Manfred in it. I especially loved the first sentence!

Good job!
iryna chapter 1 . 6/1/2010
Oh my gosh, your writing style is absolutely amazing. That is one of the best fics I have ever read, seriously and I really love how you wrote Franziska. Her mannerisms are so perfect, haha (of course she would top) 8D