|Reviews for Something about Home|
| Guest chapter 4 . 2/8
I like the idea bit i feel that bellas character is based way to much on her look...
Also pauls last name is lahote not meraz
| Curiouser-and-Curiouser101 chapter 1 . 7/20/2014
Decent writing, but a character's whole personality should not be based on only her looks. It makes her flat and unlikable. By constantly mentioning how gorgeous she is it makes her seem like the only thing she has is looks, and it makes everything so, so boring. A character needs to have a legitimate personality not just a pretty face.
| KeepCalmBePositive chapter 1 . 4/5/2014
Please come back to this story and fix all the grammatical errors. I want to read it but I just can't; not when I've found about fifty in the first chapter. Also in the summary you wrote 'imrint' and not 'imprint', which is the correct word.
| Matthias Stormcrow chapter 1 . 12/13/2013
Promising start I love it.
| Dragonflame chapter 15 . 11/18/2013
Note to self never take a story from you. I wasn't planning on it but still very good to know. :)
| Bell 1 chapter 28 . 7/21/2013
I am so happy Bella found her happily ever after in the end. She had a very tough, very abusive life with her mother. I wanted to kill James myself. I would have liked to read more about her relationship with her father in this story after she moved back though.
I am so happy you moved passed describing everyone's outfits in the beginning. It makes the story so much easier and enjoyable to read. There are times knowing an outfit is beneficial, but not that much and not nearly every character every time, so I enjoyed seeing you "grow" in that aspect.
Poor Bella just couldn't stay out of danger either. Male vampires were way too drawn toward her. Thankfully she was saved from them AND Victoria. I'm actually surprised the healer didn't heal her injuries inflicted by Victoria.
I'm glad she found Paul. He was very sweet and caring. I hope they have a long happy life with their daughter and future children.
Now for the serious... I enjoyed this story, but was highly disappointed by the grammar and spelling errors. It was difficult to read. I read A Drop in the Ocean and LOVED it, so this was a let down by those terms. HOWEVER, I see that the story was your first published, therefore, it seems you grew in your writing by the time A Drop in the Ocean came along. According to your profile, you are a big reader, so the grammar and spelling errors surprised me until I wondered if you even read what you wrote before you posted. You could certainly benefit from a beta to help clean up this story. There are betas willing to edit already posted stories. I highly suggest editing this story to fix the grammar and spelling errors.
| Jessica Lahote Black chapter 21 . 7/21/2013
Where did this savant syndrome come from? Never heard of it but interested in learning more!
| beckylovestwilight chapter 28 . 7/17/2013
love it xxxxxx
| bamagal110 chapter 28 . 7/13/2013
Aw that was so sweet I was beginning to think Vicky was gonna get her way and in a way she did...
| Passion82 chapter 28 . 4/25/2013
Loved this story...:-)
| bluee chapter 4 . 4/13/2013
sorry, read the first chapter, flicked through this, and didn't quite enjoy such a main character who is so ...a little bit over-confident about the looks department, and seems to be a bit too exaggerated about her lusty body. Maybe can work on toning the subtlety of appreciation of her beauty ... otherwise I'm sure this story would've been a nice read, but other than one-shots, this personality doesn't sit well with me for a long story, thanks!
| vampiregirl31 chapter 28 . 4/1/2013
omg i cried this story made me cry i love it :')
| Daddys little crazy bitch chapter 28 . 3/26/2013
| Passion82 chapter 28 . 2/10/2013
I think a sequel story based on Amelia would be good. I loved this Paul and Bella story :-)
| mermaidmelody18 chapter 22 . 12/30/2012
this is a very interesting story. I;m still trying to decide whether i love it or not. what really bugs me though is all the spelling and grammer errors. it would be awsome if you fixed those.