|Reviews for A Captive Light|
| Genun chapter 7 . 11/12/2010
COOKIES! Can I haz some XD.
On to the story... EEEK. WTH happened. Ken actually kidnapped Kari. CRAP! She would give herself over to Ken if Gatomon would get free, but then again Ken probably isn't going to let Gatomon go free is he? I really hope that Devimon doesn't come back, I don't think the new kids could handle it. I'm surprised Kari didn't try fighting Ken some more. I guess she never seemed like the violent kind, but this is Ken we are talking about. By now he deserves a flying-tackle-punch.
I liked the new way of saying where the scene is. For a normal book I don't think it needs too, but then again a normal book is a little larger than a fanfiction. I think it really helped me keep track of where everything was happening as it jumped about.
Now I realize Tai has grown up and actually thinks now but I'm not sure he would wait and rest before going after Kari. Then again he and the other older kids just kinda fade away in the second season. And... crap where is TK? Is he in the digi world looking for Gatomon? Uh-oh. About Izzy just "nodded without taking his eyes off the screen." That is definately how a computer geek acts. I've done that a few/dozen too many times.
I think these are some of the best types of stories. This is definitely packed with action. Thats one reason I think Tamora pierces books are only OK. I am definately, eagerly, impatiantly waiting for the next chapter. CRAP why is Ken suddenly smart. Sorry if these sound like me ranting or babbling.
| Taeniaea chapter 6 . 10/23/2010
Cool Story Ken at the door isn't he ? :(
| Genun chapter 6 . 10/19/2010
This is a nice chapter. Not as epic as the last one was, but if they all were that epic they would have to come out much quicker. I was about to say that I don't think they would make such a fuss about Davis's promise, but then again I don't remember them promising such a thing before, except for wizardmon. I love Joe's rants, yours and the ones in the TV shows. About Davis not calling Kari thats quite obvious, He fell asleep. Unless something else happened... uh oh. I'm wondering who is at the door, could Gatomon have escaped, is it Ken here to capture her? Not as big a cliffhanger as Gatomon being captured but its still a good one.
About the last chapter, Kari was never a helpless kid. Except for when she had a fever. And even then she kept walking with the rest of the digidestined.
I must have moar chapters. kthxbye? :)
| Genun chapter 5 . 10/19/2010
Yea this was much longer than any other chapter so far. First thing I liked was your disclaimer, its cute. I find it a little odd that Izzy and the others didn't search for anything when they were on top of the signal yet the spire was destroyed. The spire shouldn't be able to send a signal when its destroyed, yet the signal would still be there. Meh it could be me just knowing that Gatomons ring is there, in the grass, waiting to be found. Tai seems to have matured. I guess he learned a few things from the first adventure. I love how Davis complains and grumbles about not getting to say "Let's move out!" He would do that. And he is definately a mini-Tai. About the gears, AH! bad bad bad. They are evil, and I don't want Ken to know about them. Although I'm wondering why File Island is now part of where they are. Did Ken do that, or is it just the Digiworld changing. Hmmm, I hope its explained later.
I think its a great chapter. I am looking forward to more :)
| Genun chapter 4 . 10/15/2010
Poor Gatomon. Having to relive the memories of her past. If this is not the very evil cliff hanger I'm not sure what could be. Some feedback stuff, Ken was very much in character. Gatomon may not have the whole flashback stuff, but then again I haven't been tortured so what would I know XD. I don't think it says anything too bad about you to have liked to write this. It is very dark and sad, but its well written. I like how Ken didn't actually hurt wormmon. He would obviously strike out when he said his name and pointing out a flaw in Ken, but I think he would realize that, yea wormmon is right.
| Genun chapter 3 . 10/13/2010
Its getting better with each chapter. I'm not sure Kari would break down like that, not after nearly sacrificing herself for other digimon, or people for that matter, she barely knows. But then again it is Gatomon. While she is definitely an optimistic and cheerful person, but I can definitely see her saying, "Ken better pray Davis and T.K find him before I do." Davis seemed a little to mature for this one, like actually being the leader. By episode 8 Davis seems more like the charge into battle and think about it latter kind of guy, the one who would go and look even though they are all exhausted. I think Cody may still ask his grandfather about what to do. In a sort of round about way, without mentioning minor details, like the digiworld. Other than that I think they were definitely still in character, and it is still full of tension, and emotion.
Keep up the good work, and I might need to work on my paragraphs.
| Genun chapter 2 . 10/12/2010
Not Gatomon! That was very cruel of the Ken. I thought he would kidnap a person, but kidnapping Gatomon is just as good. At first I thought Patomon was a little to mean, but then thinking on what hes said in the first season, its not mean what he said to Gatomon, he is just teasing. I like how you are making your own digimon, and ones from Temora Pierce. Although would they really work for the Ken or could it be someone else. Hmmm. Probably Ken but I think he would have put the black rings on them. Well depends on how loyal they are. Its better for them to be able to think perfectly well than to be slaves if possible. I'm surprised though, one of the digidestined actually got hurt! That rarely happens. I think it makes it more realistic. Although how would they explain the sudden cuts and bruises to their parents. Ah well thats another story.
Its good so far. A little fast pace, but all fanfics are probably like that. I like it, even though Gatomon was captured. Poor Gatomon... :(
| Genun chapter 1 . 10/10/2010
You really caught what Ken was like. At least how cold he is by episode 8. You might not need italics for when he is thinking, but thats more of a style choice. An "e" was forgoten in digidestined, or maybe I'm spelling it wrong. I like the chessmaster comment, as he would think of something like that. Also I love how he doesn't bother to remember their names, except for Davis's. Ken would never spend the effort to remember their names unless they "humiliated" him like Davis did. One last thing, the whole Davis not quite rival but only opponent thing seems a bit long.
I look forward to reading more.
| assana73 chapter 6 . 10/4/2010
Great chapter, like always! Davis should watch what he says around Kari, especially with her emotions so wound up. I liked Joe's ranting, Izzy's tech skills, and TK's cuteness with Kari. Loved the slight change to the end! I can't wait to see what happens next. Keep up the good work and don't let school get you down!
| crestoflight3 chapter 6 . 10/3/2010
yes! A new chapter! This made my day!
Number 1: I agree with you that Izzy's one of the only kids who can talk to their parents about the Digi-things. Though I also think that Matt's dad knows about it too.
Number 2: I loved this chapter! Though I can't wait for the next one! Please upload really really soon...is tomorrow too soon? Probably, but still...I can hope...!
| merryb chapter 6 . 10/2/2010
Sorry I didn't beta this chapter! After I sent you the chapter when I was done, I got an email saying it had been posted!
| KHLostEmpress chapter 6 . 10/2/2010
Cliffhanger! Loved it. I do hope Matt is going to be in the story soon. I've found that I rather enjoy Matt a lot (still doesn't beat TK and Kari, of course, though). Loved the Takari hint (for obvious reasons). I hope you update as soon as you can! Great chapter.
| assana73 chapter 5 . 9/7/2010
YAY! IT IS SO GOOD! Your story is original but almost perfectly captures the characters from the Digimon series. There are no errors other than, perhaps, that you do not update several chapters per day, as what you write has an addicting quality to it. Don't worry about reviews, with time they will come, especially as you continue to weave this amazing tale. In short all I can say is "You rule, write more".
| KHLostEmpress chapter 5 . 8/31/2010
Great update. I loved that you put in that Joe was always counting exactly how many times they were almost killed. It totally seems like something he would do.
It's okay that your a little later than promised. Things really do get in the way. And way to go about getting on TV Tropes. It's definitely one of my dreams to write a story worthy enough to be on the Fanfic Recommendations page of TV Tropes. Weird dream, I know, but there it is. So, congrats!
| crestoflight3 chapter 5 . 8/31/2010
Great chapter...I love this story!
Kari managed to take down a control spire! Yay!
Thanks for bringing back the black gears!...not enough fics have them, though they were, in my opinion, about the same as the rings that the emperor used...!