|Reviews for Suspicious|
| F.F. Guest chapter 1 . 4/6/2014
Interesting start to a very promising story, I look forward to reading more.
| NiceNipps chapter 1 . 6/9/2010
I like how this story is heading, only that I will have a hard time waiting for the next chapter.
| Lou-ba chapter 1 . 6/5/2010
An interesting 1st chapter and on the whole i enjoyed it (as i do reading all your other work. MAJOR FANGIRL :] However, i did have a few issues with the grammer (speech marks and such like). As these were missing it was quite hard to follow in places (i do know u have issues with this sort of thing so no biggie) but maybe re-submit to your beta to puncuate it properly. Hope thats helpful. Look forward to the next chappie. Lotsa love lou x x x
| Toraus chapter 1 . 6/4/2010
| Chaney chapter 1 . 6/3/2010
I liked this big, long intro. It was an interesting story, Videl and Gohan's dynamic was new and it makes me wonder who his son's mother ("mother"?) is. However, I don't know if something happened with the formatting when you uploaded or what, but there weren't any quotation marks. That made it really difficult for me to keep track of what was and wasn't being said aloud.
| Kallu chapter 1 . 6/3/2010
Great story. Only thing was the punctuation, but if ou look pass that. it was great! Update soon!