|Reviews for Club Luvin'|
| FrancieAusten chapter 1 . 5/1/2013
I don't get the ending...
1- They slept in a room with a bed inside a club? All night? Aren't those rooms reserved for strip clubs you know?
2- So, they are married, and the club is just foreplay?
| Gloop chapter 1 . 11/13/2012
| smartcat chapter 1 . 5/8/2011
You should get a beta to clean up all the grammar mistakes and to fix up structure. Other than that, it was a good story. If you want, I can beta for you
| mayajane chapter 1 . 6/15/2010
i had to read it three times to understand the ending. I find it easier to read the dialogue when its separate from the wasn't one of my favorites because even though it was written well it was still hard to understand because the thought process for everything went by to quickly. I'm definitely a big Harry Hermione fan and I'm not flaming your story. it had good parts and not so good parts.
| HarryHermioneEdwardBella chapter 1 . 6/7/2010
| AnnDee chapter 1 . 6/6/2010
You need to work on your grammar and structure. You have a lot of run-on sentences.
You rush your writing as well. Let the scenes happen, give us some imagery.
And why wouldn't you censor the word Shit but censor the word God?
| buffycorvin chapter 1 . 6/6/2010
| logicoflove chapter 1 . 6/6/2010
This is possibly the least sexy sex scene I've ever read in fanfiction. I'm going to just pretend it's all a joke.
| FatedMoon chapter 1 . 6/5/2010
lmao what a twist pretty funny
| quinzy chapter 1 . 6/5/2010