|Reviews for Criminal Affections|
| Darth-Taisha chapter 1 . 9/2
While I wasn't a huge fan of the dialogue style in this one-shot, I did really enjoy the interactions between them as well as their thoughts. Thanks for writing something set during my favorite section.
| Esmeralda Wolfsbane chapter 1 . 5/2/2014
Very sweet! :3
| claraowl chapter 1 . 4/12/2014
| Tsuruga-Ryuuki chapter 1 . 6/14/2013
| thegreatpeterjen chapter 1 . 1/21/2013
Fun! Thanks for writing
| patricia.camargo.733 chapter 1 . 11/3/2012
WOW! I just love Hill siblings!
| yoloswagmaster chapter 1 . 12/24/2011
It was a good story, but i didn't entirely cover their personalities. Keep working on your writing skills though, you're sure to improve!
| LunaBianca chapter 1 . 10/10/2011
Interesting style, shifting POV so quickly. I like it. You capture the unfiltered, immediate thoughts and emotions.
| clarageo chapter 1 . 5/27/2011
Oh! I really like this story! thank you! maybe you can do a flashback of what happens in the night?...jajaja! hope you can! I stay with the hope of reading something that we only can dream about it. I'm waiting for your other story to continue.
| EtenalRest13 chapter 1 . 5/22/2011
I really liked this. It was playful and serious and showed very good emotion I thought. Especially Ren. I hope you do more Heel sibling stories. _
| Lady Flourescent chapter 1 . 4/15/2011
Reflective and precise. Good job!
| Adashi-san chapter 1 . 12/20/2010
I dont know what to say. Is a good work but is still missing something. I did not dislike it but neither like it thought. I guess it was too ooc this time.
Anyway. You are still a good writer. Thank you for your hard work. Hope you update your other story soon.(playing with fire)
Matta ne! *_*
| whydoyouwanttoknowmyname chapter 1 . 7/25/2010
erm you missing a few updates there spherrow ?
| Linnami chapter 1 . 6/27/2010
good, that you found your way back here ;-)
Your narrative style reminds me of a mix between the interior monologue and the "stream of consciousness". I, personally, like both of the narrative modes and you've implemented them pretty good.
But I also think you have to improve when it comes to the transition between Rens' and Kyokos'-Thinking. It just feels like it isn't round.
But all in all I think you've done a great job in trying a different mode of writing!
Keep it up!
| Littlebug21 chapter 1 . 6/15/2010
ooooohhhh yeah they had aaaaalllll night to find that! just kidding, i'm not really a perv. this was a great one shot and i love all the sweet hugs. i hope you make another good one soon. good luck! :)