|Reviews for The Last Potter in England|
| Noble Korhedron chapter 5 . 2/6
Cute AND interesting. Congratulations sir! ;-P
| agnar chapter 5 . 1/4
I think my only real concern/problem is Ron being his best man still, and Ginny being a bridesmaid.
Now I'm not saying they should be in jail or out of their lives entirely, but come on! Ron outright lied to both of them, keeping them from maybe getting together years ago, that is not the behavior of any close friend I'd want, teen or not. And thinking its ok to dose someone with potions, not friend behavior either.
No, I don't think I'd want either of those two assholes in the wedding. Any other Weasley, Neville or Luna, Remus, Dobby... Just not a Ron who kept them apart purposely and a Ginny who used potions.
| StupidChinaBook chapter 5 . 12/17/2013
I think i read a story once where Dorea Black was actually James's grandmother not Harry 's.
| strivengoddess chapter 1 . 11/2/2013
the reasoning in regards to hermione forgetting about non-magical means of communication, just does not ring true at all. I mean if she wasn't grout up in the normal world or with a magical parent it would be conceivable, however, she was not and both parents are rumered to be relatively intelligent people
so I would think it would be more likely that she was told not to use non-magical means as well as magical to contact harry, then just magical. Either way it still left many loop holes for her to get around... I just think it would be more likely someone like ron would forget about the mail or phones etc... but someone that has parents that use them as well as the internet everyday and you are reared with it it would be like being asked to forget your native language or how to breath.
| Osmodious chapter 5 . 10/19/2013
Very nice little story...almost wish it had been novel-length. Thanks for posting!
| ak chapter 5 . 8/19/2013
| BruceTN chapter 3 . 7/26/2013
"My sister came up from Green Bay to visit and I got sick for a few days."
Hmmm. Were the two events related?
| Imper chapter 5 . 7/11/2013
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| jada951 chapter 5 . 6/13/2013
| Gracealma chapter 5 . 6/6/2013
Great story. Loved your writing.
| Zucht chapter 3 . 5/15/2013
My sister has the same effect on me ;)
| Jannafrancine chapter 5 . 5/2/2013
| Runecutter chapter 5 . 4/20/2013
I do not agree on the Dorea thing, if for no other reason than being related to James most certainly would have seen her blasted off the damned rag at the same time as Sirius at the latest, so it must have been another NOT blood traitor Potter who by coincidence also died before James and Lily did. Just as it's not likely that Ignatius Prewitt who married a Black was Molly's dad as all other couples have those "1 son, 2 daughters" type comments under their marriage-bond-sign but Ignatius has none. On the other hand the Crouch marrying Charis on the right side of the tree might just be the father of Barty Sr. (and if you want to have fun his sisters could be any of the ladies in the 55-60 year age span we know of but don't have a birthname for... Augusta Longbottom for example or Amelia Bones, although Augusta seems to be really old her son was friends with James, so why expect her to be older than James parents? We don't have any age for Poppy Pomfrey too... or for Sprout, Trelawney, Hooch... if you want to get funny for another story it might be worth a thought :D)
I agree even less on your arguments about Ginny being "too close related". If their grandparents were first cousins that makes themselves nine times removed (or some crap like third cousins four removed, i never understood how the english system works, sorry) , strictly going by the law all above 4 or 5 degrees is allowed if you're not in the direct line (great grandchildren and their great grandparents :D) and somewhere in between 5 and 9 the creepyness would go away as you'd need a pretty industrious person organizing a family reunion dinner for all those related through your own great-great-great-grandparents! I'm absolutely sure i did not even meet everybody related to me through two generations less, know about them and so on.
I'm fully for the "like my small sister might have looked" thought as those thoughts don't need facts and logic but work on an instinctual and emotional level... but the relationship degree is a pretty lame dumping reason if there#s nothing else.
I'm not too sure about this epilogue. I mean Harry having a family, peace and all is wonderful, but does it really need to be told? But i can appreciate the mentions you've made about some of the things changing after the war and i LOVE every story that has Harry rejecting an offer to become an Auror. That was a stupid idea by JKR and every other profession is more likely to attract his attention after he has a) found out that he's independently wealthy and does not NEED to work and b) has finally the whole fighting thing left behind. Would he truly want to seek out new dangers by his own without the direct need to do it? I don't think so.
My idea of Harry after Hogwarts is doing some learning, founding several charities where he can put much of his money to good use and start repairing much of the damage the pureblood hybris of the last century has caused and help out the weak, despised and outcast like werewolves, orphans or muggleborns. I could totally see him continue the 1000 galleon start up money thing from WWW with other well planned shops for those who could not get other better paid jobs and so would be able to support themselves!
Flying, Quidditch, Teaching are also things he might enjoy but i can't really see him going completely to Hogwarts and growing old there like McG or Dumbles... he's too restless for something like that. Too nervous and active. Becoming something like Bruce Wayne or Tony Stark without the "night job" aside would sound more convincing to me. A philantropist and reformer of the wizarding world who doesn't shirk away from dangerous fun things but at the end of the day returns to his family.
But then during the epilogue they're what? 20? There's much time to change your mind and do other things... no need to hurry at all. The world is open for them all.
| Runecutter chapter 4 . 4/20/2013
Ahhh this pleasant satisfying warmth when finally everything comes together. I fully can understand Hannibal Smith now... i'd love to have a thick Havanna right now :D and i'm a militant non-smoker ;)
But i say you've had my heart stop there for a beat or two when Harry talked about his therapy and how he sorted out his feelings and that there was more than one kind of love... oh-oh i've thought now there comes the "like a sister" plonk of Hermione's life and she can't even say she didn't deserve it... waiting for so long and everything :D but then it all went good again. Phew, what a feeling!
(ehhh but i'm pretty convinced, that you can't just google speeding tickets with proper names and all and the Police will surely NOT show you a ticket with a real adress on it... yeah you needed to have SOME explanation, but why not have somebody at Gringotts hinting SOMETHING which is not exactly against their contracts... or have Dobby help her because his friend doesn't know what's really his heart's desire and needs this little push. The ticket thing... not so brilliant :()
And then i laughed about Harry vomiting just from the thought Ginny might bewitch him into liking her :D It might even have been worth to see an Omake where the moment of truth leads to his stomach breaking the enchantments and him puking on her instead of taking her flower :P Such symbolism, such strong imagery :D (Yeah i don't really like Ginny when it's hinted she might be worthy of Harry or deserve to be with him :D she's so not present in the books it's not even funny.) That one scene made this chapter so much better and it wasn't halfway bad before it :D
| Runecutter chapter 2 . 4/20/2013
Oh GOD! you have forgotten the MOST important NOT in the whole letter!
At least i hope you've meant it to read "I hope that someday you realize that and NOT just settle for the Red-headed idiot." or the whole paragraph would start to sound veeeery weird and wrong.
But else the letter is perfect. So tender an sweet, not the least bit bitter except where Dumbles "plan" and the loving care of his relatives are involved. THAT must be love or he would go for his pound of flesh and chastise her back for all of her brilliant reasoning this year. Scared? Yeah right... there should be a REASON to be scared. Of ever seeing Harry again and get to feel his utter disappointment. But he seems to be a better person and able to overlook such disgusting behavior or is it rather disturbing? My inner Harmonian loves it.
And now i guess the challenge is out. What do i get for a bet that she will NOT end up in Australia but rather more west-ish from England? :D Say in between New York and San Francisco? I'm not sure yet if she'll throw Hogwarts and run away (that might in addition to endangering her academical merits also be dangerous for Harry as it could lead others to him if she were too quick to follow... not the best idea at the moment when Dumbledore's plans are still possibly hostile/lethal). But as soon as she'll reunite with her parents she'll break out in despaired crying and tell them everything about this letter and her unbelievable behavior this year and start pleading to help her make it all good again. I'm VERY sure of that. And i hope if i'm wrong you'll at least have a better plan than my short guess right now and blow my mind away with how she'll reach out for Harry once again. :D