|Reviews for Her Majesty's Handmaiden|
| Sanyasin chapter 1 . 4/21
Admittedly, I only read the first para. and found the beginnings of a grand tale, but it lacks conciseness and is too wordy. Also placing verbs far from the subject creates unclear structure and wordiness. You wrote; Performing simple magic...and earn 'her' place... - better is; She (or her name) performed... It's a better flow and understanding for the reader. Also sentences like; She had never even met the man who was to become her husband... Can be done with, She was estranged from her future husband... Always find the appropriate verb- it's out there somewhere in a Thesarus dictionary. A great writing tool. Hope this helps, and keep discovering your talent!
| conan3913 chapter 1 . 9/11/2015
no i enjoyed and iniri are a perfect couple.
| mike chapter 1 . 8/13/2011
The story was fine. I'm not a femslash fan. I never understood why most guys like lesbyporn. I'm like, "Yeah, whatever." With a Conan story I want a little more action. And don't forget to put a comma after phrases/clauses at the beginning of sentences.
| Ltlconf chapter 1 . 6/12/2011
Beautifully done. I also liked these characters and wondered what happened to them after Conan moved on. Also unique in showing the aftermath of Conan, something no stories do!
The story captures the world of Hyboria in all its darkness but then also shows how the now Queen Ereshka and her consort Iniri have created an island of light in it all. You also have a good touch for showing court life and the dangers the Queen must negotiate to hold what she has as well as how much she depends on Iniri in every way to do so. This is what makes it such a touching love story as well.
I do agree with one reviewer, for those who've not seen the comic a greater degree of physical description is useful though not vital. Two I showed the story did comment on this. It was the ONLY quibble they had, otherwise is was all praise, and I share that opinion!
| iwanttobeapaperbackwriter chapter 1 . 3/9/2011
Very well written. Perhaps a solo story line involving the two will follow?
| Kairan1979 chapter 1 . 8/26/2010
That was unexpected - story that is not Conan-centric and Conan doesn't get the girl.
| Dan Sickles chapter 1 . 7/15/2010
This story was incredible. I am absolutely blown away!
I haven't read that much Conan, mostly the original tales by Robert E. Howard in the old Sixties paperbacks edited by L. Sprague DeCamp. ("Shadows in Moonlight" was my favorite.) But I think you totally captured the Hyperborean world and all of the glamorous, luxurious, sensual atmosphere of the court, plus the excitement of sorerors and black magic and vile unded things and unclean gods. And that was before the incredible romantic story even unfolded!
I hope that you will write many, many more elegant, emotional, exciting stories like this. The one suggestion I have is that you give a little more physical description of the characters, (height, build, hair and eye color) to make it easier to visualize both the tender lovescenes and tne exciting dialogue!
| Lodylodylody chapter 1 . 6/6/2010
That was unexpected and BEYOND wonderful. Loved it. You explained everything I needed to know and gave a history to these characters so I was totally into them despite knowing nothing about the original story they appeared in. Just great. And I love how you captured the whole courtly, formal, fantasy atmosphere of them in their palace. Nice job transporting the reader into a sword and sorcery fantasy world.
Now...write in even MORE different settings. :) And I would like to see more swords and sorcery tales from you.