|Reviews for For want of a nail|
| Guest chapter 9 . 9/19/2014
why do people keep killing off monica
| Guest chapter 1 . 7/18/2014
It's interesting, although you should write in past tense (it sounds better) and go into more detail in your story ESPECIALLY when something important happens, like when they first kissed etc.
You also need to ease into the situations and story a bit more.
Your character dialogue however is well written and in-character (most of the times)
It was interesting to read so far, I hope you improve in your writing skills :D
Continue writing !
| RadioactiveCatMeow chapter 9 . 8/17/2013
Awesome story. I haven't really read that many Lelouch/Kallen storys except for yours and this story was awesome.
| lelouchisbest chapter 9 . 2/7/2011
I like this story. It was pretty much a hapy ending for all the good guys.
| Primus2021 chapter 3 . 7/16/2010
Her Mother was a Lamprouge, her dad was an Ashford, so in other words he used his grandmothers Maiden name, a little harder to track down, since the only people to know that kind of thing are dead.
| Primus2021 chapter 1 . 7/15/2010
The Creators of CG: LotR R1, messed up, I had to go to at least 100 CG sights to learn that, Lelouch has 39 siblings, 2 older sisters, 10 younger sisters, 15 older brothers, and 12 younger brothers, he is the 11th prince because some of his older brothers are dead, 17th in line for the throne includes brothers, sisters, and cousins,
I Hope that helps,
| united88 chapter 9 . 6/17/2010
It would be great if you wrote an alternate version of chapter's 6 and 7.
| nxkris chapter 7 . 6/16/2010
great ending. i love that you managed to bring a good ending that showed Lelouch's group protecting the world and bringing some old friends back to them. cant wait for you next stories.
| nxkris chapter 5 . 6/13/2010
great chapter. i love that you have just slight changes, though i hope you write the alternate which you discribed at the end. update soon.
| MisterSP chapter 4 . 6/13/2010
Schniezel probably left the Avalon so he would be harder to track down.
Yes, that's about it. The thing is that Gino knew he "conspired" with Suzaku to kill the Emperor and Gino (who wasn't injured or anything like that: he was arrested by Schneizel's Royal Guard) obviously got away alive, and Kaguya and Xingke is NOT going to be happy about telling the Ikaruga staff to kill Lelouch when he should have come to them (aside from the obvious, only Kaguya, Xingke and Zero would be high enough ranking to negotiate, and technically should inform the other two before accepting), and thus making his face known and/or becoming Emperor is basically asking the Knights Of Round to come and kill him, like they do to Lelouch, and Lloyd and Cecile are obviously not very upset about having anything to do with it at all, so sticking around would not be a good idea, and like you said, sneaking away in something like the Avalon would be difficult.
| MisterSP chapter 3 . 6/13/2010
Lelouch's position as "Eleventh Prince" seems to be done merely to parallel the Japanese - Elevens. The princes from 4 to 10 barely exist at all: R2 seems claim that the 4 most powerful people in Pendragon short of Charles himself is 2nd Prince Schneizel, 1st Prince Odysseus, 1st Princess Guinevere, and 5th Princess Carine (Karine?). Considering their ages, that makes Nunnally 4th Princess. Two princes are mentioned in Code Geass for the Nintendo DS, in which they play antagonists in the game's alternate timeline. Another two are mentioned as the Viceroys of Areas 15 and 13 by Cornelia in a Sound Drama. So there's two princes that just aren't important enough to have faces, two who only exist by the merit of Nonette, Lilynette and Marika being from side materials themselves and getting added to R2 in throwaway roles for it, and three that simply don't exist.
His position as 17th in line... Doesn't really make sense, as it implies 6 other people in line to inherit. As by British rules of succession, one cannot normally inherit the throne unless one is blood related, the Consorts cannot rule should Charles die. Brothers do not inherit over sons, etc, etc. Thus, in order for there to be another 6, not including Lelouch's non-existent brothers, it must be that one or many of Lelouch's brothers must have children, and none are seen. There's the possibility that Succession is not gender biased, but since Euphemia is younger than Lelouch, he would inherit before her, and there's only 2 elder sisters. Also, it's uncommon for the Emperor to "grade" their line of succession. That he might make Schneizel Crown Prince is possible, but bothering to do that, or doing that for at least 17 individuals is not what you'd expect from a man of Charles' character. Again, this isn't something they've thought very long about.
Yeah, the Shinkiro thing... But considering what happened before then, any extra senseless bull stacked on top isn't the main focus of those people banging their heads against the wall about it. *Someone* had to have gotten a really bad thought about what just happened. Of course, that Lelouch captures the entire UFN meeting is probably the only reason Ohgi and Tohdoh managed to keep their jobs, as that would have been the only proof they had that wasn't speculation.
I don't remember the Cecile thing, but I agree about Lelouch and Kallen. You've got to wonder if Lelouch understands what he got himself into: He really thought he was going to starve to death (or at least dehydrate) while his father watched. Does he have any idea what a terrible agonising death it is to suffer a horrible thirst over a matter of days? It's a terrible death! And, yes, it does seem that Kallen was mostly concerned with the idea that Suzaku becomes the Knight Of Zero, when Kallen was coveting that position for herself. It's not like ruling Britannia is much of a step up from ruling the UFN in all but name, and she may have even expected that he'd try to do it.
It's quite obvious that C.C. goes back to pick up Cheese-kun. In one scene, she and Marianya are just standing there alone, and C.C. says that she has to go pick some things up before they go, and next thing you know, C.C. is holding a big plush cheese blob while sitting behind Mordred's control seat. Oh, and I have no idea if there was a 100th Emperor, His Majesty, the Great Cheese-kun.
I suppose the potentials died, leaving us with the small number that we see. One fic about Rolo says that the Geass Assassins are trained by killing each other. There's also the possibility that those that don't have a useful Geass - or have Geass that are too powerful, like Lelouch's is - are silenced, or experimented on.
Firstly, "finally" and "lastly" mean the same thing. They BOTH mean "the last in a series". Ultimately, Lelouch is a smart boy, but he's one part genius, three parts prideful and two parts Large Ham. Lelouch is likely a more obvious name than Lamperouge is, and Lamperouge hadn't been used for nearly 20 years. I think C.C. may have said it was his mother's name - that he was clinging on to that part of his past, but she may have been referring to his first name - during the Narita incident, but I can't be completely sure. His mother's Knighting Commemorative Plate from one Picture Drama only refers to her as "Marianne". Also, Lelouch gave Viletta a fake name, and may have had a fake ID. She suspected that he might be Zero, or another Black Knight, but she didn't know his name until Shirley told her, and didn't know he was a Prince until after he was captured. For the most part the only people who'd recognise his name are the same people who'd recognise his face, that being various relatives and the Aries Villa staff. Even Milly, who's family was dependent on his mother's support, didn't know until Lelouch snapped at her, thinking that she already knew. You might be right, and it might not be her real name. Best thing is to try not to use her name at all. Of course, it's not as odd as Nunnally's apparent psychic powers that only get explained in a novel which may or may not be even remotely canon.
| nxkris chapter 4 . 6/12/2010
great chapter. i love the fact lelouch has been getting CC pizza from his enemies accounts and they are only finding this out now. you should have a few emailed messages about the pizza purchases in the next chapter. also the time lelouch and the others spend was great, though i would have had them move around a bit more. tamaki should steal the guren m2 and go join lelouch. update soon.
| nxkris chapter 3 . 6/12/2010
great chapter. i love that you kept it mostly the same as the original only adding a few people to help lelouch. update soon.
| snakeboy33 chapter 3 . 6/12/2010
I look forward to the continuing.
The Black Knights' reactions were rich.
| united88 chapter 2 . 6/10/2010
I would go with Kallen join lelouch instantly, reson's since's you had Kallen join the attack of the geass order then try to defend Lelouch when they betray him, they would most definlty think she was under his geass. And with no knowledge of Jeremiah's canclear they would try to kill her to relive her of her "curse".
Sill it is your choice.