|Reviews for Enhanced Vision|
| AWorldWithoutShrimp chapter 10 . 2/11
I'm glad to see you're updating again! This is one of the few quality AW stories out there and I've enjoyed reading it immensely. Your dialogue is both spot-on and a real pleasure to read.
| For Spite chapter 10 . 2/1
Oh good, more of this. The characterization continues to be excellent, not just Lash and Sonja but even Andy. Lash's objection to Sonja's plan is entirely sensible, but I suppose 'eventually going to collapse when there's a power interruption' is superior to 'never built at all' in Sonja's mind.
One minor complaint: "she didn't understand the practicality of wearing suspenders and a belt on the outside of one's pants" doesn't really make sense. I mean, opposed to what? Wearing them on the inside of one's pants? Maybe you just meant she didn't see the purpose in wearing both? If so, you could lose the pants part.
| For Spite chapter 8 . 8/24/2013
It's good to see a multi-chapter fic devoted to this pairing. And no, your other one that's not on this site doesn't count, it skips straight to them being together.
I like the tactic Lash is taking here, making everything a game of wits, because it plays into Sonja's established character as a good set up for romance.
There are lots of nice little touches here that put together make the story good, like Grit's reaction to Sonja's declaration that 'none of them enjoy this' when she so clearly does or Flak's pride in the lenght of time it took him to learn a word. Small things make a story good and flesh out characters.
| chaosrin chapter 8 . 2/10/2013
That letter is so Sonja-ish putting down her mind which i can so see that also the analysis of her reaction towards Lash. The Grand Chamberlain talking out the letter in a female tone for Kanbei is hilarious and it really speaks of Kanbei's love for his daughter. Thanks for updating and my bad for the delay in review.
| chaosrin chapter 7 . 12/27/2012
Nice update don't see any mistakes and its been quite a while.
| TheBleachDoctor chapter 7 . 12/12/2012
I love this story but why does it take a quarter of a year to update?
| chaosrin chapter 6 . 10/27/2012
Always like the drama between Sonja and Lash.
Love the Lash filled interest. Still wish there's more sonja been a while since i
visit the advance war section. Anyway nice chapter and of the added details of the country is interesting.
Please do update this more often.
| TheBleachDoctor chapter 6 . 7/28/2012
Oh, I thought this was dead!
| Trainalf chapter 6 . 7/24/2012
It's short, but it's nice to see an update. So Lash IS up to something.
| Sudentor chapter 5 . 5/20/2012
My finding this fic was the result of my attempting to look for Sonja/Lash yuri, which probably won't help raise any confidence on your part for my review. Nevertheless, allow me to say that this is one of the more well-written interpretations for Advance Wars that I've seen thus far. As a fairly "child-friendly" series, Advance Wars was always more cartoony than it was serious, and I'm rather impressed at how you managed to nail down the story to a spot closer towards reality, all without sacrificing the personalities and general levity of the characters by making them resemble actual real-life military leaders, something that likely would've made them darker and edgier. Even though the tone of the entire story was much more mature than anything Advance Wars 1, 2, and 3 ever presented, characterization of all the characters somehow remained spot-on, and I greatly applaud you for such.
Narratively, the story flows well even when you don't consider the adjustment in tone. Favorite parts so far include Sonja pelting an aide with anything not nailed down in frustrated anger (Sonja can be such a violent tsundere), Flak's inability to understand Colin's insults, and Sonja's episodes with Blue Moon's ministers. I'm mildly concerned by the pacing of the story when taking into account that you have stated this to be a Sonja/Lash fic and the general length of your chapters - Lash doesn't even make an appearance until "The After Party" - but you're good at keeping readers entertained until then, so that's a plus mark for me.
I'll be keeping an eye on this story, and hoping there will be an update soon. Heavens know you're writing for a medium that doesn't get enough attention, and your abilities deserve more credit.
| MessengerOfDreams chapter 5 . 5/17/2012
I really do like this story. Everyone is in character, and I love the dynamic between Grit and Sonja. I notice your average updating speed is on the north side of several months, so I hope you get motivated to write more cause I'd love to read more!
| TheBleachDoctor chapter 4 . 9/12/2011
| Edge of the night sky chapter 1 . 8/23/2011
I like it.
| Ashvinoth chapter 4 . 8/4/2011
Just when you've completely forgotten a story, all of a sudden an update comes.
While it was quite a bit shorter than I had been hoping for and the plot hasn't moved a great deal it was still an enjoyable read.
| scoutmasterkb28 chapter 1 . 2/28/2011
Nice start! You seem to know how to write motivational speeches as seen in Kanbei's talk. Keep up the good work!