|Reviews for Osa Bella|
| vermonstermom chapter 15 . 6/16/2010
LOVE for Myg and OB! I would post this on Chap 16 but it's not up yet. I must echo someone else on Twitarded who said that they feel while reading OB that they're reading a published novel. I too feel this way. Your writing is so professional, so smooth, your characters are well developed, your grammar perfect. Grammar is a MAJOR peeve for me, which makes a lot of FF reading difficult to the point of pain at times. Your tale is refreshing. Characters are believable and everyone has their own voice.
And your beta rocks as well, thanks Mr. Myg for indulging all of us!
| egirlsmom chapter 15 . 6/16/2010
oh myg- WOW! I'm not even sure where to start...I have been waiting for this chapter for awhile. I knew once there was mention that the club would be overnighting there, this would be a big one.
couple of thoughts
first off, i am from "here", camping at crescent lake a million times growing up and you have hit the visual spot on! so awesome for you to note the clarity of the water because it really is breathtaking and i'm glad everyone has that visual...nice work!
second - wondering how you were going to resolve caught edward with his pants down so to speak, being all vampy...i love the lucid dream idea, so clever! you have given bella the ability to live out this fantasy without putting too much out there (or so she thought)
third - wow, all the visuals with the kermode and the symbolism of that scene...INTENSE!
finally - tucked all neatly in bed...wow, i love this story.
if i had to pick one favorite exhange from this chapter it would have to be...
"God, I wish you weren't seventeen," I said, pulling back. "I feel like such a predator."
"You're killing me," he said. "You've no idea how funny that is."
Thank you so mych myg (and mr myg) for continuing to take the time to write this lovely story!
| katmiles77 chapter 15 . 6/16/2010
I just loved the last chapter you posted on Twitarded. It's not here yet, but I hate it that Edward seems so depserate for Bella to understand him that he tells her he can read minds. He know she won't believe him-and she doesn't. That was the saddest part of the chapter for me.
I do hope that Derek takes a hike. I guess he's a good guy, but he's not for our Bella.
| M474 chapter 1 . 6/16/2010
I'm reading on Twitarded, but just wanted to stop by and give you some love, plus put you on my faves!
| Anna Faze chapter 15 . 6/15/2010
OK, so first of all WOW. So good.
And then so many questions ... I think you have me right where you want me at the moment ... utterly intrigued, excruciatingly curious and more than a little confused :)
So, his eyes were red but it was an animal so they shouldn't have been, but then the man on the beach - is he the bear in human form which would explain the red eyes, but then I thought the bear was female. Or is Bella really Pamela Ewing and it was all a dream. No, it can't have been a dream because how could she dream him being exactly him with the swimming and Alice's vision of her definitely not marrying Derek.
I laughed at poor Bella ... if he rejects her it will like every other sex dream she's ever had. Poor thing but so funny.
And then Edward's beautiful declaration and the lovely chasing her tears with his fingers and tangling them in her hair. I swoon.
Oh and Derek? Shut up about Jesus - they are so incompatible. And then Bella prayed for sleep ... I loved that bit.
The nature v nurture conversation was very interesting too - having children is kind of like your own little science experiment with that... it sure changed my view on how I think the whole thing works.
OK, so this a very long, rambly, muddled mess of a review - I blame the sleep deprivation from reading this last night :)
Your story is wicked good and your writing is divine. Thank you again for sharing it. I'll wait patiently for your next update!
| Anna Faze chapter 14 . 6/15/2010
So, I read misread "prom" and thought Angela and Erik were selling "porn tickets". Oops.
"I will not think about those things, I told myself, as I thought about them." Brilliant :)
Lots of lovely little bits of canon twistiness (? invented word, I think) going on in here - maybe a bit of Midnight Sun as well?
I kind of want to shake Bella just now. Not too hard, just enough to wake her up a bit.
Only one chapter left ... I feel sad ...
| Holly1980 chapter 15 . 6/14/2010
because I fangirled all over twitter, you already know how much I loved this chapter. After rereading it (because last night it was well after midnight when I got to it) I realized a few things I didn't pick up on last night. But, before that, let's talk about what I loved. The whole "dream" sequence! I loved the line, if this is a dream I am so having sex with you-right here, right now. lol GO BELLA! His admission to her broke my heart. I want these two together so bad. Now, the fight with Banner. I loved it. He had no right- NONE what so ever and I'm so glad that she called him out on it. Now I can't wait for their little talk. I need for it to break them up. Like Edward said, she's not going to marry him. He has a reliable source (lol Alice).
Now for the things I picked up on after the second read. I'm so stumped about these bears. The vamps eyes change red when they've had human blood. Edward's eyes turned red after he drained the bear. Then the next morning he was wearing sunglasses to cover it up. They have to be some sort of tribe that shape shifts. I wonder if the same would happen if they were to drain one of the wolves. So now that leads me to the mysterious man in LaPush. You have me all kinds of turned around! lol But I love it. I wouldn't profess my undying love on twitter if I didn't! Oh, and Mike? Dude needs serious help. Thank goodness the school year is almost over. He's such a girl.
Now, I have a question for you. Are you participating in the FGB? I NEED an Edward POV. I need to see what all Alice is saying! Please tell me you are? Oh- and I know that these chapters went up pretty guick, but do you have some sort of posting schedule?
Enough fangirling! It was awesome!
| Anna Faze chapter 13 . 6/14/2010
Lovely, lyrical writing ... but such sad reasons to say yes.
You wind up a chapter beautifully, not just this one, but all of them. The last bit is always the best.
I'm going to save the next few chapters for something to look forward to tomorrow.
Thanks so much for sharing this, I've loved spending the evening here.
| Anna Faze chapter 12 . 6/14/2010
How can she be with poor, dear Derek after that.
I loved Edward's sly little "take a breath" ... did he do that on purpose knowing if she got a headful of his scent she'd be putty in his hands ...
Some absolutely lovely writing ...
| donnersun chapter 15 . 6/14/2010
Excellent, my friend. Excellent. :) Although I'm a little sad that Edward ate the bear. She (the bear) was supposed to kill Derek, remember? But that's ok. There are other bears. ;)
Anxiously awaiting chapt 16.
P.S. I know my reviews are far from constructive and helpful, but I hope you know that this story is totally pwning my ass. Seriously. I love it. :)
| kismit1496 chapter 14 . 6/14/2010
she danced with him IN PUBLIC! God now I have Ron White's voice in my head!
| kismit1496 chapter 13 . 6/14/2010
settling makes me soooo sad!
| kismit1496 chapter 12 . 6/14/2010
OMG she has way more restraint than I do!
So will we learn if he has control issues around her?
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| kismit1496 chapter 10 . 6/14/2010
men like that are just terrible in bed and use a religious excuse to lock you into be stuck with them!