The tension of Bella meeting the bear was palpable.

Edward "I'm a hunter." so much in this one little line.

Amazing story Myg.

Wow, that was amazing. Myg, I love your writing. I love this take on the story. I can't wait to see it all play out.

1) Charlie's humor - when he gives Bella the pepper spray for the bears, her reaction and him saying it's good I didn't give you a pistol then. Perfect

2) "but Illeana treated her Tarot deck like her DSM-IV" LMAO! I have a Psychology degree and this line was perfection. I laughed so hard I scared my cats. And why do Psychologists like Tarot and palm reading etc? I like it all too :)

3) The foreshadowing perhaps of her Four of Pentacles card - "You'll be eternally Bella" which sounds like a great band name Eternally Bella.

I couldn't stop at chapter one. haha I LOVE Illeana! I pull cards all the time. Unfortunately, I've never pulled anything that suggested I may end up with an Edward Cullen. ;)

I'm finding that I can really, really relate to this story. In an eerie kind of way. Eerie, but good...such is my life. lol

Can't wait to move on to chapter 3...

~meg

Oh, I love it! I wish I had time to read the rest tonight. :)

I especially like the way everyone notices that there's something really, really different about the Cullens. Besides their looks. That always bugged me in the books/movies. They were supposed to be so "other worldly" but no one really seemed to notice. Or they at least just shrugged it off.

Can't wait until I have time to sit down and catch up!

~meg

How you have so little reviews I don't know.. but oh, I didn't notice until I got here, Carpal-tunnel vision... sorry. But this is really a good story! You should be really proud of yourself. The entire dilemma Bella faces thinking she's falling for just another 'teenage student' forces your readers to open their minds to the phrase 'love exists beyond the confides of time and reason'...Something among those lines anyways.

I look forward to reading more of your story.

I just finished reading up to this point and I would go back and review each chapter up to this point but I am too lazy! I just have to say that using the name Mercy Brown is pure genius! Not only is it an obscure vampire reference, but I can so see that she could be the real Mercy Brown! Now this characterization of Bella is beautiful! She is acting like an adult but still likes to have fun and when I think of her and THIS Edward together I think it is Perfect. Your Edward is also acting a lot more mature than Cannon Edward and I am really appreciating that. While he may be physically 17 he also has the maturity to see that he and Bella belong together! But also the character to know that he can't always get what he wants. All in all, I think this has to be my favorite story in terms of well developed characters and plot!

Myg-

I absolute adore your bella. I think she is relatable and real. Lately I have been feeling as though some fanfics are just a little too out there for me, don't get me wrong, I still go bat shit crazy when they post. Your story however has a subtlety that is so sweet yet still adult (thank god she is not a teenager anymore, it's becoming harder and harder to relate with each passing year...)

Things I can't wait to find out...

Banner - dude is lame...when is she going to end all that chaste bs? I mean I get why he is there, the safe choice yadda yadda

Jacob - I love this new twist on that relationship, not just the "buddy"...

Edward- love him obvs...little creeps me out in that I am a teacher, but of middle school and there is just NO way in hell 14 is anything but hyper, smelly and gross so I am safe there...but how is his circulation "condition" going to play out? how will she react? will it change her views of him being "17"?

The Boat - I feel as if she is a character all unto herself...I don't sail, but I do live in the PNW on the water, and I must say, I just love this whole storyline...as CWIA made everyone want to get tattoos and piercings, I think this boat is going to make everyone want to sail!

so in short (well really not so short at this point), I just absolutley love this version of the world we all love to escape to...can't wait for saturday!

Kelly (egirlsmom)

You rock Myg...I know I'm reviewing ch. 1, but I've read through 12...awesome so far - looking forward to seeing where it goes next!