|Reviews for Deadly Decisions|
| ABC1270 chapter 1 . 1/29
This is an awesome fic. I'd really like to see the sequel.
| Otakugal chapter 1 . 1/21
| ConstanceJ chapter 1 . 1/18
Rad as hell!
| Shadowed Sorceress chapter 1 . 1/8
I love this! Please update ~
| Alphaofthedragons7 chapter 1 . 12/2/2016
I enjoyed how Sakura still likes Sasuke but doesn't let it get in her way. I feel like she would have started treating him like an equal and start growing out of a silly childhood crush. She was independent in this. I wish cannon Sakura acted like that. Then her falling for him and still willing to fight him to bring him back would have had made an awesome story. And then Sasusaku would have made sense. Just because you love someone doesn't mean your going to worship them. In that universe, Sakura would actually have been his equal. It's kind of her fault that she isn't his equal in cannon. It doesn't depend on physical strength, it depends on who you are.
| Guest chapter 1 . 11/6/2016
This is such a good one shot you should totally make it into a story
| Guest chapter 1 . 10/10/2016
| an1979 chapter 1 . 10/7/2016
Where's that sequel? ;)
Let me list more typos I spotted.
It seems you have a problem distinguishing homophones...
I looked briefly over last chapter of Lilo's fic and there are too "then" where "than" should be.
Most are chronologicaly sorted:
"The forest had been even worse then Wave country,"
"Almost thirty seconds less then when she was in the academy."
"So she was faster then in the academy."
"The results were less then stellar."
"I woke up early this morning and bought some heavier food then rice"
"so it was more milk with coffee then coffee with milk."
"What Sakura knew was a bit more then the average genin."
"Unfortunately doing this for more then a month"
"But in the last few days the pain has been much less then usual."
"Her basic exploding tags were really good and she was making them faster then she believed she would."
"The discretely separated back room of the non-civilian part of the shop was so different then the flowery front."
"Keep in mind that I know tags sell better then soldier pills."
"She actually squeezed him for a bit more then sixty percent on the merchandise"
"And I have the feeling you'll be bringing me more then just tags soon enough."
"More then he did for a hundred kagebunshin."
"More then he ever gathered at once."
"The different types of energy moving into his stomach and he was forming much more physical energy then mental."
"And as the chakra began to form he could tell a lot less was wasted then usual."
"Three more then yesterday."
X bigger thAn Y
first thEn second
"The Academy building was dark and eerie in the night and the playground with all it's ninja additions"
"Unfortunately doing this for more then a month or two was useless since after a certain point things slow down as ones body hits it's optimal efficiency."
"replaced the log to it's place"
"would keep indefinitely on it's own"
"the unused ink lost it's properties."
"an indulgent smile formed on it's large face."
-its, not it's
Think like: my(mine) vs I'm/I've
"Daddy always knew how to handle her mothers a bit old fashioned ideas."
"And ninja's grow up so fast."
"after a certain point things slow down as ones body"
"It's good manners for the summoner and summon to introduce ones selves"
"Left my last ones inside some dead ninja near the border."
"If that one isn't dead by now he'll out live us all"
"In stead she eagerly anticipated her day."
"and that ninja's heal faster"
"Tho I suppose you never pay attention to those."
"from the unique electric impulses of a sentient, that means a living thinking, brain."
- SAPIENT (like Homo Sapiens - THINKING man)
Any rat, frog etc. is sentient (having a brain capable of feeling pain, seeing etc.)
"Yes we do. Its how we think."
"So to recap, that means to repeat something to confirmed you learned by the way."
"Naruto exclaimed but her laughed with her."
- but he
"Heck by the time she went home a sundown"
- at sundown
"I realized I can't be a damsel in distress an more"
- any more
"And for the first time she recognized that the decorations along the walls has seals hidden in them."
- had seals
What'l it be?
"I was also wondering if you were I the market"
- in the
"A whole week had past since that conversation"
- had passed
"With or without the foxes chakra."
"He was gonna be Hokage so fast everyone heads would spin"
"It was a week before the Chunin fights am she"
- and she
"I's good for my chakra capacity."
Sakura led the way and then notice the small shelf on the side of the kunai shelf.
"She watched mentally counted down the ten seconds"
| Risukasa chapter 1 . 8/21/2016
Ooh, very good!
Sakura is somehow very under-appreciated character, I think, and especially during this period in the series. It's somehow sad that she's just completely forgotten about and without a mentor while Naruto and Sasuke are learning all these super-awesome jutsu with famous teachers. I like your take on her determination and how much progress she is able to make in such a short amount of time. I really hope you wrote a sequel for this and if there is one, I'll definitely read it right after posting this!
There are some typos and grammatical errors in the fic, but it didn't bother me that much while reading.
Thank you for writing and sharing!
| Shrilaraune chapter 1 . 7/6/2016
Where's our sequel?
| Spica75 chapter 1 . 4/18/2016
I really, REALLY hope you write that sequel.
| Indecisive Bob chapter 1 . 4/10/2016
Nice little one-shot you've got here! But damn, after a nice uplifting short story of self-improvement and confidence building, you sure ended on a downer. Thanks for sharing!
| nedrag94 chapter 1 . 3/18/2016
Great story! Hope there's a sequel coming.
| passanger chapter 1 . 3/1/2016
Great story. I really like strong Sakura.
| Geminia chapter 1 . 2/23/2016
This is awesome! Hope you post the sequel soon!