|Reviews for Summer Lessons|
| thebetawholived chapter 2 . 11/1/2014
Interesting start with a lot of potential as a story.
I bet there are a lot of people not taking the class who would benefit as well. Does anyone think Ron could pass the test?
| Poet Wroet chapter 2 . 10/4/2014
Ooh, what do you mean Hermione is condescending to Harry?
| Lady Siren Jade Riddle chapter 11 . 8/4/2014
This was a very interesting story with well thought out details. I greatly enjoyed reading.
I do have a bit of constructive criticism if you're willing to read it. If not, I'll leave you here with my praise! :)
The last few chapters read more like a very detailed outline rather than a full bodied story. The lack of real scenes or dialogue lead it to seem more like an overview of everything. I would suggest you expand it a bit and flesh it out by actually writing down more full scenes between characters. We don't need to see every detail and every conversation but lifelike interaction would definitely help.
| Guest chapter 11 . 7/30/2014
Loved it excpet for the Ginny part of the story line. I can do with out her.
| 1sunfun chapter 11 . 7/31/2014
Interesting and good Story.
| Leo's Lair chapter 11 . 2/14/2014
Excellently written, great story and decent plot speed. Well done. Cheers.
| Alexis Rinaldi chapter 11 . 9/27/2013
I just found this story and thoroughly enjoyed it! It was a nice change from my usual and I added it to my C2 as a well-written fanfic. Thanks so much for sharing your thoughts and talents!
| Dubhe Epsilon chapter 11 . 9/4/2013
I'm not quite sure if I liked this. It seems to have very little in terms of a plot-very few obstacles are presented, and those that are are instantly overcome. I also don't really like your portrayal of Hermione, as a bossy, jealous, egotistical friend who is constantly trying to force Harry to spend time with her. I can see many of these traits in her-Hermione can be bossy and pushy about studying and the like-but I also see a kind and loyal friend that Harry wants around and others find interesting because of her intelligence and passion for what she believes in. But I won't go too deep into that-this is your story.
On the other hand, it was entertaining and, despite including many cliches, original. The grammar was excellent, and that always makes for a pleasant read.
If you were going to change this or edit it at all, I would advise you tone down the paragraphs where you discuss nothing but how much Harry's changed and how great he is now. I would also have you tweak Hermione's portrayal slightly-maybe eliminating a few of the more extreme adjectives-and bring her closer to the girl who was one of Harry's best friends. I'm not saying you should portray her positively, I'm just asking for a more fair assessment of her strengths and weaknesses. For instance, she stands up for what she believes in and fights for what is fair. You could develop a subplot from her distaste with the misogynist wizarding culture. She could protest or try to change it. Anyway, these are just suggestions. Do what you like with them.
| old-crow chapter 11 . 8/26/2013
This was a very nice story with an original storyline. You obviously thought it through and developed your story quite well.
For some reason, it felt like you intended to take quite a poke at Hermione at every opportunity, with very little real reason to do so. That's an easy trap for a storyteller to fall in to.
Thank upu for takeing the time to envision, develop and polish your story.
| reader chapter 11 . 7/2/2013
Are you serious that how you end it, I am totally disappointed.
| MuggleCreator chapter 11 . 6/15/2013
Awesome stuff. I'll be looking at the sequel.
It all makes a lot of sense! Pity the war interrupted so much in the other timeline...
| Engrprince chapter 2 . 6/14/2013
Great premise. I have enjoyed your story so far. It is well written
| flame55 chapter 11 . 5/22/2013
this is great
| firebolthallow1572 chapter 11 . 5/15/2013
I loved story about being with Tonks and how they help Harry chance and being much Happier than before. Are you going do a sequel?
| Steve-Arkarian chapter 11 . 5/10/2013
I LOVED this story! It was wonderful!