|Reviews for Time Travel, Marauders, The Harry Potter Books|
| Sherilyn p chapter 2 . 1/15/2013
I love this story please continue it. I would love to read it to the end. Keep up the good work!
| Guest chapter 5 . 12/21/2012
oh well, love this story, hope you can be able to finish it !
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/1/2012
Well, Harry Potter is listening for hi duh been news what is that for dunno and noth'in happens then he dudley get 'tacked by dementors and stuff bye
| kittyhawk09 chapter 5 . 8/31/2012
That's really bad. Please update as soon as you can. I can't eait to read the next chapter.
| Guest chapter 5 . 7/14/2012
| Marauder at heart 4ever chapter 5 . 6/13/2012
I like your story so far. I like how it seems to be different from the original since harry seems mad at ron and hermione. The only problem I see is that the story is sort of confusing. How do James, Sirius, Remus, and Lily already know that harry's their son for sure? I personally feel that the characters are too close to each other already. They seem like they aren't surprised at all to see harry. Also I thought they would have more hostility towards Regulus and Scorpius since their Slytherins, or at least because Scorpius is a Malfoy. Also will there be any interaction between Regulus and Sirius, since they are brothers and may hate each other, and they may or may not want to make up. I think you also need to clear up what brought them to the place, unless you plan on doing that later while they are still in the dark for now. Also, how are you going to get the new characters who join the reading? Also, are you going to have the people from each time period be from the same year, like how Luna and Harry are probably from the same year in the future, since they're still a year apart, or are you going to mix it up.
I hope I'm not being bothersome, but I'm curious on what you're going to do with this story, and if you meant for certain things to be that way, or do you just need to clarify a little.
Marauder at heart 4ever.
| mimichamp chapter 4 . 2/7/2012
awh poor sirius!
| potter-granger-mad chapter 5 . 1/20/2012
sad about what happened but i cant wait to read more of your stories when you do get them re-written
| Guest chapter 5 . 7/18/2011
I hate people who don't finish a story keep that in mind and also I have conoections to powerful people so I hope finsh this story soon
| amber-chick chapter 4 . 6/10/2011
Let me start by saying that this is quite a good reading-the-books fic. However, I think that you could do with some improvement. For example, although your grammar is certainly better than some other authors on this site there seem to be a lot of occasions where you leave out commas or capital letters and this detracts from the story. Perhaps a beta could help remove this problem?
In addition, it is very difficult to see where your characters are coming from in this fic. You keep mentioning that Harry and Luna hate Ron and Hermione yet we have no idea why. I'm guessing you want to keep the readers in suspense but it is irritating to see these sorts of comments and not know the justification of them. Furthermore, Ron and Hermione are major fixtures in all three books - are you constantly going to have Harry and Luna make sly deragotory comments to each other about it and not have the others notice? It's already getting annoyingly unrealistic and we are only a few chapters in.
Not to mention that Harry certainly doesn't act like a forty-year-old man - shouldn't he be worried about his wife, his kids, his job? Even if he is in a 17yr old body, most 40 year olds do not take kindly to being reprimanded by their mum, even if they have never met her. And why did they just suddenly accept that Harry is James and Lily's son? Even if Harry does look like James, why automatically assume that Lily is the mother? Even if they did notice the eyes, Lily is not the only woman with green eyes. Are they already in a serious enough relationship that they can assume that? Not knowing those sorts of details severely detracts from the story as the reader does not know the reasoning behind the comments and it seems less like a proper story and more like a retelling of the series with random comments inserted.
Similarly, it is difficult to engage with Scorpius because all that we know about him is that he is in Slytherin House. Ditto with Regulus - from what I can gather about his age, Regulus should already be serving Voldemort, or at the very least be very sympathetic to his causes. He did not stop thinking this until just before his death. Yet nothing about his attitude suggests this; I'm sure reading the books would change his attitude but merely reading 3 chapters should not be anywhere near enough. Not to mention the falling out Sirius had with his family which would certainly have affected Regulus and his feeling and/or behavior towards his brother.
I hope you don't think I was too mean and picky... I do think your story is alright but I also think you're capable of making it much better and more complex than it currently is.
| Rose of Dark Life chapter 5 . 3/11/2011
oh man! Stupid computer!
| Kaist chapter 4 . 3/4/2011
What's with the "traitorous Hermione and jealous Ron"?
| 3domfields chapter 4 . 3/3/2011
It;'s a good fic but you say this too many times
"Yes." Harry looked annoyed, Remus didn't notice, but Luna did and she put a calming hand on his shoulder. (A/N No Luna and Harry are not together, they're just friends, for both of them.)
They cant not notice like a hundred times, it's unrealistic.
| UltimateLoveStorys chapter 5 . 3/3/2011
its ok, i hope you get your storys back :)
| llauren chapter 3 . 3/2/2011
um its AUROR. not Aura or whatever you said.