|Reviews for Ice Age 4: A New Age|
| Ilovesmiles4 chapter 4 . 6/12/2013
Wow this is so good! Update soon!
| bellachristina1812 chapter 1 . 9/22/2012
Awesome chapter! I totally love it 3 Thx for reviewing my story by the way (you were the first one :D)
| mwang chapter 3 . 9/4/2011
you must really want the herd to go to the future...
| Goddess on a Highway chapter 3 . 9/23/2010
Good chapter! Love the DiegoxSid moments, in times of need Diego truelly likes Sid. lol
Very well written, I only noticed you repeat your words sometimes, but the grammar, spelling and word choice are good.
| Goddess on a Highway chapter 2 . 8/18/2010
Good chapter! Wow, you've done a great job describing this modern world through the herd's eyes! Well done!
| Goddess on a Highway chapter 1 . 8/15/2010
That's a very touching chapter! So cute how Diego tries to comfort Sid! You've also added a lot of detail! Good job!
Just some minor spelling errors and some run on sentences, otherwise you've done a great job!
| Kristen chapter 4 . 7/24/2010
Love the story! Reminds me of the time I was kidnapped by men in white coats...
-Flashback- "Come with us, Kristen. We're not gonna hurt you."
"Are you sure? That big needle looks like it could hurt me."
" This is just in case you don't come with us on your own."
"Okay. Why are you talking like that?"
"Uhhhh... Look! A van with comfy sides!"
"-Gasp- Can I ride in it? !"
That man was a big meany later. But I got to go home a couple of days later! Whoops! Got sidetracked! Anyway, loved the story! Bye-Bye!
| Weazillah chapter 4 . 7/7/2010
I can't believe that I'm just now getting to this awesome story XD Update soon :)
| Mad-Face Pro c.c chapter 4 . 7/2/2010
Your character is great. But the paragraphs are too large to read(not to be mestup or anything). This is why in this chapter I skip some paragraphs. Sorry - Paolokid12
| goldenpuon chapter 4 . 6/29/2010
Nice chapter. At this point, I'm interested in what is on the characters minds, with all this weird stuff and cars and such around them. I think ti would be helpful if you added a bit of that in.
I'm also assuming that Morgan was the only one who saw them run down the street? I'm not sure but the rest of the people at Starbucks didn't seem to panic/be shocked when they helped her up.
You are doing well on grammar and splitting up paragraphs. Good job with that!
I also wonder what is going on between Diego and Sid, if anything.
| levy120 chapter 4 . 6/27/2010
You had me scared with this chapter once. Namely, that “middlepart-break”.
When you suddenly started to talk about the two girls and their milk and coffee I was fearing that this story would become yet another “Self-insert Mary Sue” story, which the Ice Age Fandom suffers from A LOT.
Anyhow they seemed to be only a little comic relief and that is good.
However, they are a ‘misleading’ comic relief. You can easily avoid this effect by not giving them names and sizing the description of their coffee and milk adventure a little down. You could basically just start out with “Meanwhile, two girls sat at the coffee-shop/ice-café and were having a drink. It was a nice peaceful day, yadda yadda and suddenly one of the girls noticed her milk was shaking […]”
You also definitely need that “Meanwhile” or else people will think you just started a completely new story and might or might not stop reading; that’s the very risky difference between TV and Writing. TV is a fleeting experience, writing takes time and focus on anything you read. You can of course make it a bit longer like the example up there for the cinematic effect, but you definitely shouldn’t do it again like it is right now ;)
If it is a pun you intend to pull from personal life experience, those who it refers to will understand it no problem. All other people however, will be only confused.
Keep this story as original as it is please.
| goldenpuon chapter 3 . 6/19/2010
You are doing better with the paragraphs although I'd continue to work on them. (I had the same problem when I first wrote fanfics.)
I found it surprising that the herd could speak English and that the humans could understand them. I found that a little over the top. I sort of wished that they would have not been able to understand each other. It could have also added a comical element if the animals saw the humans doing something strange with their communication or vice versa. But that is just my opinion.
I just wonder what kind of a place they were in and what time period they are in. I have many question yet unanswered about what is going on but I'm sure they will be answered in upcoming chapters.
I hope I was not overly critical. To be honest your story is very good. Just trying to find things you can improve on.
| Mad-Face Pro c.c chapter 3 . 6/18/2010
Diego did save Sid's behide. I wonder what's next. - Paolokid12
| goldenpuon chapter 2 . 6/17/2010
NOW this is getting interesting. The first chapter reminded me a lot of how I wrote a story a few years back where the herd was taken to the present day.
But the second chapter is not. It is VERY original. Questions come to mind such as "What are these men after?", "Who are they?" and "Why do they seem so power-hungry?"
I found the second chapter in the least very intriguing, interesting, and original. I am really hooked on your story now and wonder what they will do next.
As for points to improve, I would recommend making your paragraphs shorter (makes it easier to read) and also paying attention to grammar although you aren't hat bad.
Other than that, no other major things I can see. Keep up the good work! I am hooked on your story!
| Mad-Face Pro c.c chapter 2 . 6/17/2010
Cool. These scientist are ctually being cripy. I guess Kyle will handle them. Wait this just gave me an idea thanks KaylaDestroyer. - Paolokid12