|Reviews for Dutch Door Action|
| Sunny's Priceless Dream chapter 1 . 6/19/2010
Sooo I guess I wasn't logged in for my last review.
I hope you were able to tell it was me...who else loves Ted's ass.
BUT ANYWAY I WANTED TO REVIEW THIS AGAIN JUST BECAUSE I CAN!
I LOVED IT!
| Thee Freaking Britty chapter 1 . 6/18/2010
Like I reviewed on Sunny's story...My laptop went kaput (stories and all) and I am on my friend's computer. Fucking piece of shit. I have most of my stories on a flash drive at home somewhere...
So whenever I get a new laptop, I'll update one!
Onto the review.
God I wish Randy would pull his board shorts down in front of me...I'd be ALL over that. And then some. Plus, he needs to take lessons on listening. He doesn't listen worth a shit.
Oh well. I still love the kid to death. WAIT he's not a kid :( He's THIRTY. I'm still kinda iffy on that. But it's whatevers, you know?
I liked this. It's funny. :)
| Guest chapter 1 . 6/17/2010
THERE ARE TIMES I FIND JAY ATTRACTIVE AND I SEE WHAT KAIT SEES IN HIM.
Like when he's wearing flannel and jeans.
But all the other times, I don't understand her love.
Kait would never ask that many questions. She'd just fuck him on the kitchen floor.
Ha, Ted has no right calling Adam fat.
BUT HIS ASS IS TO DIE FOR.
Aww Randy's jealous!
I LOVE SLUTTY JAY. AND SEXY JAY.
BUT RETARDED JAY IS MY FAVORITE!
I LOVED THIS MACK
AND IF THIS WAS WRITTEN LIKE A SCREENPLAY IS NEEDS TO BE MADE INTO A MOVIE. I'D BUY IT.
| Goldust chapter 1 . 6/17/2010
This reads like a screenplay. Too much dialogue, comparatively. You need to work on writing quality non-dialogue sections, because just reading straight dialogue is very difficult.
| CrystalxShip chapter 1 . 6/16/2010
YESSSSSSS SEXY JAY
OMG SHOPPING WITH EDGE AND JERICHO?
WHO STOLE THE BUDDHA STATUE? I LOVE THAT THING
THAT HOUSE TOUR DESERVES AN OSCAR
OMG THAT FUCKING DOLL
I HOPE HE GOT RID OF THE BOWL OF ROCKS THAT HE USED FOR A CENTER PIECE
OH MY FUCKING EDGE! DO YOU REALIZE HOW I MELT WHEN HE ACTUALLY LICKS HIS LIPS? ITS LIKE HE KNOWS HES FUCKING SEXY
IM FUCKING LOVING THIS JAY
OMG THE FUCKING AWFUL SIDE SWEPT GEEK HAIR HAHA
IM A SHOWER GUY HAHAHAHAHA
AHH HE CAN FUCKING STRIP ME ALL THE FUCKING TIME THAT SNEAKY FUCK
AGAIN, JASON IS FUCKING HOTTTT
MY FAVORITE BLACK BUTTON DOWN?
HE BETTER BE SICK OF BEING THE RETARDED FRIEND I WAS ABOUT TO DUMP HIS ASS FOR DOLPH
OMG HE WANTS TO RAPE ME
RANDY NEVER WEARS PANTS
I LOVE SEXY JAYYYY
AWWWW POOR EDGE IS INSECURE ABOUT HIS WEIGHT
AHH RANDYS SIGNATURE LINE
AND THERRRRRES THE WHORE AT HIS FINEST
EWWWWWWWW I DONT LIKE THE THOUGHT OF JAY IN TRUNKS
I MEAN HE HAS GREAT LEGS BUT EWWW NO
HAHAHA HES JUST A SLUT NOW
FIRST HE SCREWS ME THEN HE SCREWS YOU ITS DUTCH DOOR ACTION
IN THE HOT TUB WITH A COUPLE OF COLD ONES
OMG I CANT GET ENOUGH OF SEXY JAY