|Reviews for Two Weeks|
| Drithligh chapter 1 . 3/10/2013
I love the tone you've set in this first chapter. And I also like the changes you made to the back story and that you didn't dwell on explaining those changes. Very exciting and entertaining beginning.
| 2lulu2 chapter 2 . 3/8/2013
For chapter 4: I especially loved the flippant, "Oh, and vampire crap."!
PS, apparently I read this years ago because my attempt at reviewing last chapter was denied do to already reviewing that chapter...
| 2lulu2 chapter 1 . 3/7/2013
I'm totally intrigued!
| nwashburn77000 chapter 37 . 3/5/2013
Love love love this fic. I had given up reading them for a while because the plots were often totally destroyed by inane twists and turns (like Jacob and pregnancy and lemons). Why ruin a perfectly sweet love story with so much smut? This story was beautiful and I so enjoyed reading it. Love this chapter from Edward's POV. it was really wonderful and left me wishing you had more chapters written. Thank you for a lovely read! One my new faves.
| ded1 chapter 35 . 1/28/2013
That was a great read. Thank you. I hope your non smoking is getting better.
| ded1 chapter 20 . 1/27/2013
congratulaton on quiting smoking. It is hard. I love your writing.
| Guest chapter 1 . 1/10/2013
Welcome, then, to the world of fanfiction. If this is your first time then I wouldn't have been aware. After this chapter I became interested. you have a talent for writing obviously.
| PeaceLoveTwilight687 chapter 37 . 12/6/2012
I enjoyed your story very much. I liked the twist that the Cullen "children" stopped going to school because they were tired of it. I always wondered how they managed to do that for so long. I am not sure I could keep doing it over and over again especially with never forgetting something once you learned it. It was very neat to see all of the Cullens in a different way. Great work!
| venure chapter 1 . 8/8/2012
Great and mature take on the original story. Thanks for sharing it with us, I loved it!
| Annalivia chapter 34 . 3/19/2012
I just read your writing advice, and now I understand why you write so well! It makes so much sense, and it really puts the finger on why I would stop reading a fanfiction after the first chapter. If there's no depth to the characters, there is no point. Your story is the beautiful counterpart to that, your characters are so well described (especially Edward). I never really got canon Esme - she's motherly, so what? The way you depicted her really brings that home though, it makes sense now. Thank you so much for writing this, it has bee a real treat!
| abbyweyr chapter 37 . 2/27/2012
nicely told story. very enjoyable. nice ending and liked the bits/pieces and Edward's ch 8 POV. Thanks for sharing.
| abbyweyr chapter 15 . 2/26/2012
good set of chapters. Jessica really mean spirited. Angela wonderful counterpoint to her. Ball bouncing off of Edward's head, funny.
| abbyweyr chapter 10 . 2/26/2012
Since this is already completed, I will review about every 10 chapters or when take a break. This is a delightful twist of canon. Bella more openly aware of things. Nice interplay with Alice. Esme's meals sound delicious. Looking forward to continue reading later today.
| Debby-1957 chapter 35 . 12/23/2011
It was funny to think of Bella’s letters home being ‘Thirsty! Thirsty! THIRSTY!’ And I enjoyed reading the exact quotes from the books and movies whenever they happened. Bella’s desciptions of her change were interesting, “Hell had a lower level, run by Satan's eviler cousin.”
Emmett was funny of course. "I get to be there when she hunts polars for the first time!" And, "I think that's a fair deal!"
I really liked how you described Bella’s thinking capacity. “I could have memorized every book in existence, remembered every experience there was to have, and still have had room left for more. Like an infinite gigabyte hard drive on a computer.”
Your way of writing PG-13 scenes was excellent. The emotion and affection were there but not the details that are just embarassing. I appreciated the reasonably clean language, but personally, I would have substituted ‘oh my gosh’ instead of saying God’s name.
I love your writing, and I’m impressed with the good grammar. There were perhaps a handful of errors that I barely noticed as I eagerly read. Most of my comments were done on my second reading of your story. I’m trying to do better about making comments when I find a story that is really good.
I thought your ending was perfect! Talking things over with Carlisle, taking notes and sharing them with Edward. And finally talking (and crying) honestly with Edward about her fears. Just right.
I enjoy thinking about the psychology behind the story like you do. You would probably like all the analysis on , especially an essay called, “Guest Post: A Psychological Look at Twilight”. It’s By Deborah M. Chan, posted on June 5, 2009. Extremely interesting.
| Debby-1957 chapter 36 . 12/23/2011
It’s interesting to see a little of the process behind the finished product. Thanks!