|Reviews for LuxPain|
| Yo chapter 1 . 7/23/2011
Oh gosh I LOVE this~! I love this Atsuki and you had me cracking up! There was only one thing I noticed. It's not really well-known in the fanfiction community but it's still important. When describing how someone said something, use a comma and a lowercase. I.E. "That's pretty," he said/drawled/cried/whatever. It's a little confusing and slightly annoying but once you understand it you'll be pointing it out and it'll drive you insane. O.O
Anyway, I absolutely love your characterization and I really look forward to seeing what you do with this. I've played Lux-Pain through four times and the translation kills me, but I still love it :D Thank you for writing such an awesome fix!
| Sick Hacker chapter 1 . 7/18/2010
Very good. The characterizations of each character are strong and they all seem very IC. The one thing that I would suggest is keep Atsuki's past a little in the dark, at least for now. Would be interesting to come back to later. As a rewrite, you've started off very strong and I like that.