Reviews for In the Arms of Defeat
jen87 chapter 1 . 6/13/2011
I enjoyed this piece very much. Suggestions to repair breaks in the flow:

"...and I wish that this time you wouldn't have GIVEN in..."

"Pride does NO longer exist, if it ever did...I NO longer smile and I wonder who was, in the end, the one to be broken."

"We both LIE in the arms of defeat, hating each other –what we've become-...

Well done!