Reviews for A Pale Shadow
in sync chapter 1 . 7/25/2010
Oh wow, this was fantastic. I love reading about Lav, its interesting to see how other people write her, and I think this was a great insight on her after Greyback attacked her.

'Her sun had blazed the brightest, eclipsing other girls and scorching so many with its intensity.'

That line was gorgeous.

~Mystii
mew-tsubaki chapter 1 . 7/11/2010
ZOMG. ;_;

Mara, this... Unbelievable.

I do like Lav. She's actually one of my fav charries, funnily enough. The title is so right for this story. I'm just... Wow.

I think few remember that Lav was attacked by Fenrir. It's a detail that's rather blown over and J.K. never mentions Lav again and we have no idea of the girl's life afterward. But this... I know, I know, too many ellipses, but I'm just so d*mn speechless.

I love this fic to bits. Her history, her attack, her future-it's all laid out there for everyone to see, but she doesn't want anyone looking. Why should she? She, who prided herself on her looks and charming ways and can no longer be that Veela-who-wasn't-a-blood-Veela?

The last line made me so upset for her; it was a zinger that could only ring true.

Beautiful, beautiful work, Mara.

-mew! :( :3
ThePandorica chapter 1 . 7/6/2010
This was beautifully written. Lavender was in character, especially with the 'she'd rather have died' bit. :)

Nice work!

Lucy*
RoseScor90 chapter 1 . 6/25/2010
You've pictured Lavender exactly as I had imagined!
xxx-angelin-xxx chapter 1 . 6/24/2010
This was so sad... You wrote it in a way that makes us, the readers, see her pain and point of view. It's just great!
Morghen chapter 1 . 6/22/2010
Wow, this is so strong. I had totally forgotten that Fenrir attacked her but I love the way you showed the aftermath of the attack. I really liked the way the words flowed along! Your portrayal of Lavender was great; I loved the way you compared her to sirens and what-not. Even though she just lost her looks, I can really feel how it ruined more than just her face. Did that make sense?

-Morghen
Dream of Many Dreams chapter 1 . 6/21/2010
So sad for Lavender. I liked it. I thought you did a very nice job and I felt that it was very much in Lavender's character to feel she had been completely ruined by Greybacks attack. It was excellent :)
ACCT REMOVED chapter 1 . 6/21/2010
I really liked that, I've never thought about Lavender outside of the Half-blood prince movie so this was an interesting glimpse into her. Very nice, but sort of sad too.
Sinistra Black chapter 1 . 6/21/2010
great use of the lyrics, I like that you chose Lavender, although I think I would have picked Pansy for her bitterness, she's already full of hate, that would have drove her over the edge XD but this is just awesome in a simple way; The past that is never coming back, and even tho she is still beautiful, Lavender only sees the damaged the werewolf has done to her shoulder, which is sad and pathetic when you think about it, a part of a body that can be easily hidden shouldn't really matter that much, it's not like he changed her lovely face. But the fact is, she knows those scare are there even if ppl can't see them, she does and that's the big difference, she'll forever be self conscious, he took her beauty away, he killed her in perhaps a more definitve way then if he'd taken her life. Great work Claire