|Reviews for Academy Duelist|
| NF15617 chapter 1 . 4/21
if there is one thing any fiction that involves Yu-Gi-OH needs to have, it is correct descriptions of the duels in the story. I spotted some pretty big errors in this story that need to really be fixed.
Firstly you made a mistake with the first card that you introduced, Reborn Zombie you stated it as in Def position with a def of 100 but in the description of the card you stated the def as 1600.
Second was with the first kitsune monster you stated that it can lose 1000 attack points to summon a kitsune monster with 1000 or less attack points from the deck or hand and then when Naruto summoned out Kakashi you had Sho state that Kakashi, with an attack of 2600, had 300 less attack points than the kitsune. However when Kakashi was summoned the first kitsune would have only had 1900 points due to giving them up to summon the young kitsune card.
Third and is that when you write the card effects you don't mention what they can actually do, just the type of effect that they have. This would be okay if you had the characters explain in detail what the effects of each card are and not leave it up to the reader to assume what each card can do.
Fourth is that you either need to brush up on the rules of the game or make it clear that the rules of the game are different from the anime or actual game and tell the readers what the new rules are. In the last summon for the short duel you stated that a monster was placed into face-down attack mode and that is not a legal move in the anime or real version of the game and thus shouldn't have been possible to do. This could've been a typo but you should really read through the duels to make sure that they follow the rules established in the story so far.
Finally is that the cards themselves need more descriptions so that the reader doesn't have to google search each card played to remember what it looks like, this is most likely more of a problem for those who are still following the progression of the game into the new age of cards as one tends to forget what some of the lesser known cards look like after seeing so many.
IF you are still reading to this point I will say that despite this very underwhelming chapter I will continue to read the other chapters of this story in the hope that it will get better.
| Ranma Uzumaki of the Kontongan chapter 5 . 12/26/2014
Hey Man Greet story so far and i love how you made it and oh yeah this is the card am submitting hope you haven't done this one, peace!
Orochimaru The Snake Sage
Effect-Orochimaru The Snake Sage can not be destroyed if you discard one card from your hand or the top of your deck to the graveyard or you give up 500 life points.
Second Effect-Orochimaru The Snake Sage gains 200 attack points for every Male Monster on ether side of the field.
| Guest chapter 1 . 12/4/2014
I just started reading this i mean common fifty something chapters im like ill give it a shot start to really get into it at chapter nine and its gone wtf dude
| Brehze chapter 5 . 12/4/2014
| maxridelover chapter 5 . 12/3/2014
this was good!
| Maisam-431 chapter 1 . 12/1/2014
can you continue this story?
| Ghost chapter 1 . 10/19/2014
tree of shinju
ritual summon for 'The primordial beast,jubi'
when activate discard all 9 tail beast card from field,hand and deck,you may summon The primordial beast,jubi
| Ghost chapter 1 . 10/19/2014
The primordial beast,Jubi
Cannot normal summon or tribute summon,
ritual summon by using tree of shiju,by discarding all 9 tail beast from hand,field or deck,ritual summon this monster,when summon this monster is in defenses mode,the defense power is plus 1000 for any biju card in the graveyard.
monster effect 1: this unit can only attack by sacrificing two other unit,when activate plus the original atttack of the sacrifice unit to the attack power of this unit and change the position to attack position.(return to defense position when done attacking, lose attack power and defense is halved)
effect 2if opponent control one unit,this unit cannot be destroyed by trap or spell.
effect 3:if opponent control two unit,this unit may attack twice
| firebluebird2006 chapter 1 . 10/4/2014
do wish you had used the english names that way i know who your talking about.
| haseothesage chapter 54 . 10/3/2014
The promordial god Jubi the ten-tailed 12. 7000 ATK 7000 DEF Ritual Monster. Use rise of the Shinju tree Ritual card. Can only be summoned when all 9 biju monsters are in the graveyard and Rise of the Shinju Tree is played. All human and humanoid monsters on the field are all destroyed(on both sides) but all attack points are added to the controllers life points. Cannot be destroyed by battle,spells,traps, or effect monsters. Can only stay on the field for 3 turns before sent to grave(the turn it is summoned doesn't count). Any human or humanoid monster summoned after Jubi is on the field the controller must pay 800 life points each turn to keep them on the field.
Kaguya the mother of God. Level 12. 9000 ATK 9000 DEF. Cannot be summoned until Jubi is sent to the graveyard from the field. All Dark and Light attribute type monsters cannot be summoned to the field while Kaguya is on the field. Cannot attack the turn she is summoned. Cannot be destroyed by card effects, traps or spells. Controller gains 1000 life points for every spell card on the field. Opponent takes 700 damage to life points for every trap card on the field. If the god tree field spell is active Kaguya cannot be destroyed in battle.
| Argorok chapter 54 . 10/1/2014
Please make a Naruto/Alexis lemon eventually.
| Dinok Sil Naakin chapter 30 . 9/2/2014
Nice chapter ill read more then make a longer and better review..TA TAH!
| Brehze chapter 53 . 7/18/2014
Great story so far keep up the amazing work can't wait for the next chapter
| 26Naruto26 chapter 51 . 7/17/2014
You did not change the story much... Hell last few lines were copied pasted from the original...
| deathincarnate65 chapter 12 . 7/1/2014
tsunade just because