|Reviews for The Hero's Brother|
| Walker chapter 1 . 3/8
I like the premises of this story so far and how your doing it. When other people try to make Naruto less good or a little darker they go way over board, I like how your doing it. I can't wait to read more.
| tgstuckface chapter 15 . 3/2
are you going continue the hero's brother
| Guest chapter 10 . 2/28
its jiraiya and i
| ExplosiveSex chapter 6 . 2/23
What the hell? Why are you writing the story as if you're actually telling the story? One moment it's third person and the next you throw in the word "I" as if you're the effing narrator when you're not. You are the writer. Just one flaw in an otherwise tasteless fic. And this Naruto can't get any more stupid and arrogant. Like I said in my past review, no way this little twat can master a Rasengan and throw in an element to it WITH NO GUIDANCE OR TEACHER AT ALL. Apparently he's a genius on an whole different level than Shikamaru and then he becomes a retard and shows off his rasengan to up Jin's? What's up with that? You decide to make him all apathetic and silent but when Jin taunts him he becomes all high and mighty? I fucking hate stuff like this where Naruto's parents hate him and ignore him for absolutely no reason at all. Right from the beginning, you already established that they ignore Naruto because he doesn't have a giant demon sealed in him? Minato beating Naruto a pulp? The entire village stuck on Jin's dick? So in order for you to achieve what you want in this story, you have to dumb the entire village down to borderline retard fandom? By the way, killing Ten Ten off for no reason? Didn't you say Naruto was a stealth expert capable of sneaking into the Hokage's office to look at the Genin teams? Do you have any idea how difficult that is? And yet he couldn't outsmart a girl a year older than him so he resorts to killing her? Fucking inconsistent tasteless piece of shit fic.
| ExplosiveSex chapter 4 . 2/14
I like how you throw around the terms 'S-rank' and 'Kage level this and that' when you have no idea what you're talking about. I get that this is your story and what you say goes, but the stuff in it are highly unrealistic, such as Minatos freaking massive height that would be impossible in canon. What's your purpose for making him so god damn tall? To make him look better or what? Shinobis are ninjas. Which means quickness and stealthiness. None of which I can see a damn 7 footer trying to do. And Minato in canon was insanely fast, faster than the Raikage who dodged Amaterasu at point blank range. How does a 7 footer do that? And onto to the whole situation with Naruto. I don't care how talented he is or how prodigious he is, an academy student will NEVER in a million years be capable of learning, much less, mastering an S-rank jutsu. If this Naruto had Kurama a.k.a massive reserves, then yes. Maybe. But for this academy student, with slightly above average reserves to master a plethora of B, A, and one S rank Justus is impossible. And just because he reads a scroll on it or something, doesn't mean he is capable of wielding it. And you still haven't given us a good reason as to why Minato loves Jin and hates Naruto to the point of actively and obviously sabotaging his academy grades. This story is throwing my head in circles.
| ExplosiveSex chapter 3 . 2/14
What in the fuck. Did you just make Minato 6 foot 10? That's unrealistic and more than a foot taller than his canon version. He's taller that any other canon character, EVEN Kisame. Sorry, but I just can't imagine Minato, a 5"10 man that is 6"10. That just throws all his speed feats out the window seeing as how he is so damn tall and doesn't use the Raikages lightning armor. In canon he was fast because of partly his frame and size, how does a 6"10 guy move remotely fast than a shorter guy with equal skill and training? You're making Minato look like a pro wrestler instead of a speedy shinobi that is skinny.
| Guest chapter 5 . 2/2
Several points, but the main one is that you should have Naruto join Danzo or Itachi adn KILL HIS FAMILY!
| INTHEDARKESTNIGHT chapter 15 . 1/3
WHENS THE NEXT CHAPTER COMIN OUT?
| Belanore chapter 15 . 12/26/2013
| Agato - The Hadou Inari chapter 4 . 12/21/2013
How about you go back to sucking off Kishimoto? Dipshit canon lover.
| Agato - The Hadou Inari chapter 1 . 12/21/2013
What is with you pissants thinking that red haired bitch deserves to be spared?!
News flash, SHE DOESN'T! Canon loving fuckwad.
| INTHEDARKESTNIGHT chapter 14 . 11/23/2013
keep powering naruto up, he's earned it for all the shit he's been though!
| Three roads chapter 5 . 11/15/2013
gotta say, his first kill kind of threw me a little. I mean i understand that naruto is dark but... killing an innocent like that... even if it was in a attempted robbery heat of the moment situation... it seemed to sudden... kind of like he went from grey naruto to dark/evil Naruto for at least a moment... and killing Ten-ten of all people... i don't know about others but that isn't my cup of tea. Other than that though i am impressed by your story so thanks for writing it.
| INTHEDARKESTNIGHT chapter 12 . 11/12/2013
| INTHEDARKESTNIGHT chapter 11 . 11/12/2013
konaha, beware. your in for a scare... or ten